The Table Below Shows the Number of Visitors to Ashdown Museum

Lilie King

Lilie King

Scored a 7 on the Writing Test Twice

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 11 Test 4 Writing Task 1.

the table below shows the number of visitors to ashdown museum

Sample Essay

The table displays how many people visited Ashdown Museum in the year prior to and the year following its refurbishment, while the pie charts illustrate the responses to surveys of visitor satisfaction during the same two years.

Overall, visitor numbers and satisfaction both increased following the refurbishment.

There were 74,000 people visiting the museum in the year before it was refurbished, and this number climbed significantly to 92,000 in the year after the refurbishment.

Moving on to visitor satisfaction, those who rated their experience as ‘dissatisfied’ made up the greatest proportion of respondents in the year before the museum was refurbished, at 40%. However, this number showed a dramatic decline to only 15% after the refurbishment. The proportion of respondents who were very dissatisfied with their visit also fell, to only 5%. The proportions of those who responded ‘satisfied’ and ‘very satisfied’, in comparison, both went up in the year after the refurbishment, to 40% and 35% respectively, and these were the two most common responses that year.

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How to Vary Your Language

were very satisfied with

Example     At 35%, those who were very satisfied with their visit made up the second greatest proportion of respondents in the year after the refurbishment.

Note that in ordinary English, “satisfied” includes “very satisfied”, and if you want to refer only to people who answered “satisfied” and not also include the ones who answered “very satisfied”, then you can use the two constructions below.

rated their experience as “satisfied”

Example     At 40%, those who rated their experience as “satisfied” made up the greatest proportion of respondents in the year after the refurbishment.

responded “satisfied”

Example     At 40%, those who responded “satisfied” made up the greatest proportion of respondents in the year after the refurbishment.

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10 Responses

  1. The provide table represents the number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment and the year after the refurbishment and the pie chart illustrates the results of the surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the both time periods.
    Overall,the visitors satisfaction is almost doubled in the year after refurbishment than the year before refurbishment. And total number of visitors also raised upto 92000 from 74000 after the renovation of the museum.

    According to the pie chart, the people who are dissatisfied with the visit was decreased exactly a quarter in the year after refurbishment. While coming to the people who are very dissatisfied decreased a minor portion of 5% in the year after the renovation of the museum.

    The people who are satisfied with their visit after the renovation are increased exactly 10 % and people who are very satisfied with visit more than doubled and reached to 35% in the year after the restoration of museum.And the people not responded remains unchanged.

  2. the given table illustrate the information about number of visitor to ashdown museum who visited two different time period before the renovated and after and pie charts depict satisfaction reviews by visitors about both old and new museum. it is noticeable that couting of the visitors were significant gain after the refurbishment. overall, it can be seen tagt in the survey of refurbished museum people had extreme satisfied than old museum. there had only 74000 tourist visited during the before refurbishment however, after the refurbishment visitor number had increased till 92000. survey of old museum that, 40% people were dissatisfied from museum. in contrast, year after refurbishment the amount of dissatisfied people almost swiftly decrease and recorded at 15% . very satisfied visitors were almost more than double(35%) in the favour of renovated museum and satisfied reviews also gained more popularity in new museum (40%) as compare to older museum but no response people were same in both time period although, dissatisfied reviews were 40% in before the refurbishment which had rapidly decreased in new museum

  3. The table displays how many people visited Ashdown musenen in the year prior to and year following refurbishment.The pie chart illustrate the details regarding satisfaction level of individuals who have come on the same year.

    Oveeall, it is evident that there was a significant increase in the number of toursit after its renovation. In addition, the review of the sightseers were outstanding after the refurbishment.

    Looking at the table in detail, 74,000 people visites the museum prior to restoration, and it elevated to 92,000 after restructuring. A rapid rise of 18,000 individuals was evident. With regards to the satisfaction level before rebuilding 15% were very satisfied, and it doubled when it come satisfied one. 40% completely got dissatisfied and around 5% of people have not given their response. But the following year after renovation, 40% of individuals remained satisfied, and 35% were very satisfied.Eventually the dissatisfied reduced to 15%. However, visitors who haven’t responded remained the same in both year.

    1. Sorry for the late reply. I’d give your essay a 6. I don’t think you need to mention “no response”. This category is not important at all. Also, try not to describe trends in such detail. Instead, you should make some comparisons. At least point out the biggest categories in both years.

      ✖️ “74,000 people visites the museum prior to restoration, and it elevated to 92,000 after restructuring.”
      “Restoration” and “restructuring” don’t mean the same as “refurbishment”.

  4. The given table illustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum in the previous year and the followed by year it was refurbished. The pie chart denoted their satisfaction level as a percentage in 5 categories considered for the same two years. The number of visitors had been increased over the year while their satisfaction level too had been increased.

    According to the survey, the proportion of satisfied customers had significantly increased twice the level after it was renovated. Both satisfied and highly satisfied proportion was one fourth of the total before and it had increased up to three third after the renovation. However half of visitors were in the category of either dissatisfied or highly dissatisfied before the renovation happened and it has grammatically decreased to lower than one fourth of the total. However the percentage who had not responded to the survey remains the same in both two years which was 5% of the total visitors.
    Moving on to the visitors count, there were 74000 in the year before it was refurbished, and the count increased significantly to 92000 after and it was a clear increment of 18000 head count.

    { Dear Ms.Lilie King , please let me know my band score you can give for the above task 01)

    1. Hi, I’d give your essay a 5.5. It contains many grammatical errors. Also, you don’t need to describe the trends in such detail. Make some comparisons instead.

  5. The combination of table and pie chart reveals the information of count of people, who visited Ashdown Museum and survey pertaining to their satisfaction level prior and later to its renovation.

    Looking at the details, it is clear that a sharp incline was observed in visitors’ counting, after it was renovated, which rose by 18000 from 74000 of initial year. From this, 5 per cent individuals did not respond in the survey conducted and remained static for both time periods.

    Strolling forth, the proportion of people who stated their experience as ‘ satisfied ‘ was 15 and 35 respectively in both given years . With regards to those who rated themselves ‘ dissatisfied’ and ‘very dissatisfied’ , both showed a dramatic reduction, former reached to 15% from 40% over given years and latter plunged from 10% to its half after refurbishment. Although those who stated their satisfaction level as ‘ very satisfied ‘ were significantly above one- tenth initially, escalated to 35%in the later given year.

    Overall, it can be seen that along with an increment in number of folks visiting to Ashdown Museum, their satisfaction level also witnessed a surge. However, a drastic fall had been observed in dissatisfied visitors’ ratio.

    1. Sorry for the late reply, in your Details Paragraph 1, you used “from this”, but how did you know all the visitors took the survey? Besides, those who did not respond are not important at all. I don’t think you need to mention them.

      In your Details Paragraph 2, you only described the trends. There is no comparison. I think you should at least mention which group is the biggest after refurbishment.

      ✖️count of people
      ✖️visitors’ counting
      ✔️visitor count

      1. I think you can get a 6. You need to be careful with grammar. Most of your sentences either have grammatical errors or are unidiomatic.

        ..the proportionS of people who stated RATED their experience as ‘ satisfied ‘ was WERE 15 and 35 PERCENT respectively…

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