The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 11 Test 4 Writing Task 1.
The table displays how many people visited Ashdown Museum in the year prior to and the year following its refurbishment, while the pie charts illustrate the responses to surveys of visitor satisfaction during the same two years.
Overall, visitor numbers and satisfaction both increased following the refurbishment.
There were 74,000 people visiting the museum in the year before it was refurbished, and this number climbed significantly to 92,000 in the year after the refurbishment.
Moving on to visitor satisfaction, those who rated their experience as ‘dissatisfied’ made up the greatest proportion of respondents in the year before the museum was refurbished, at 40%. However, this number showed a dramatic decline to only 15% after the refurbishment. The proportion of respondents who were very dissatisfied with their visit also fell, to only 5%. The proportions of those who responded ‘satisfied’ and ‘very satisfied’, in comparison, both went up in the year after the refurbishment, to 40% and 35% respectively, and these were the two most common responses that year.
How to Vary Your Language
were very satisfied with
Example At 35%, those who were very satisfied with their visit made up the second greatest proportion of respondents in the year after the refurbishment.
Note that in ordinary English, “satisfied” includes “very satisfied”, and if you want to refer only to people who answered “satisfied” and not also include the ones who answered “very satisfied”, then you can use the two constructions below.
rated their experience as “satisfied”
Example At 40%, those who rated their experience as “satisfied” made up the greatest proportion of respondents in the year after the refurbishment.
Example At 40%, those who responded “satisfied” made up the greatest proportion of respondents in the year after the refurbishment.