The Graph Below Shows Average Carbon Dioxide

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 11 Test 3 Writing Task 1.

Average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person, 1967-2007

the graph below shows average carbon dioxide

Sample essay

The line graph displays average carbon dioxide emissions each person in four different countries produced between 1967 and 2007.

Overall, while per-capita carbon emissions in the UK and Sweden went down over the course of this 40-year period, they went up in Italy and Portugal.

Despite a steady decline from about 11 to 9 metric tonnes, emissions in the UK remained higher than in the other three countries over these 40 years.  Sweden’s emissions first rose from roughly 9 metric tonnes in 1967 to its maximum of about 10.5 metric tonnes in 1977. They then dropped significantly to only around 5.5 metric tonnes in 2007, making Sweden one of the smallest per-capita emitters of carbon dioxide of the four countries that year.

Average carbon emissions that each person in Italy was responsible for climbed gradually from approximately 4.5 to almost 8 metric tonnes between 1967 and 2007. In Portugal, each person only produced around 1.5 metric tonnes of emissions in 1967. This country’s emissions then grew steadily and reached a similar level to Sweden’s by 2007, at about 5.5 metric tonnes.

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How to Paraphrase “Carbon Dioxide Emissions”

“Carbon dioxide emissions” is a common and well-recognized phrase. Don’t try to change it. Otherwise, we may give completely the wrong impression. For example, if we use “the average amount of carbon dioxide that each person produced”, readers may be confused. This is because the only carbon dioxide most people produce is when we breathe out. Alternatively, and with a different meaning of “produce”, an employee at a dry ice factory might produce vast quantities of the stuff.

But that doesn’t mean we can’t vary our language. Once we’ve established the context in our introduction paragraph that we’re talking about average carbon dioxide emissions per person, we don’t need to repeat “average”, “carbon dioxide”, and “per person” again and again in the rest of our essay. Using ‘emissions’ is enough. See how I used just ‘emissions’ in my third paragraph.

Besides, we can use these constructions to vary our language:

  • Per-capita carbon emissions in the UK and Sweden decreased.
  • The UK was the biggest per-capita emitter of carbon dioxide during the entire period.
  • Average emissions that each person in Italy was responsible for climbed gradually from approximately 4.5 to almost 8 metric tonnes.
  • On average each person in Portugal only produced around 1.5 metric tonnes of carbon emissions in 1967.

Note that I didn’t use “the amount of carbon dioxide emitted/produced/released”. I kept the original wording “carbon emissions”, but used different grammar.

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  1. The displayed graph illustrates the discharge of Carbon dioxide per head
    in mean during 1967 to 2007 in four different countries UK,Sweden
    Italy and portugal.
    As an Overall trend, the proportion of CO2 emission in UK and Sweden were
    greater than the average of italy and portugal during that time
    whereas the maximum average of CO2 discharge in portugal was same as minimum average
    of Co2 emission in sweden, it means both countries reaches above 5 metric tonnes in mean by 2007
    however the highest discharge CO2 of italy is almost 8 metric tonnes
    which close to the lowest edge of UK’s releasing CO2 in 2007.

    In 1967 United Kingdom was on the top of the graph in average of 11
    and it slowly droping to 8.5 metric tonnes in 2007, dispite in 1967 for sweden the average
    CO2 emission starting was similar as United Kingdom discharge amount in 2007,
    then,it improved significantly to 10.1 metric tonnes in 1977,and suddenly declined rapidly
    in every decade reaches to the average of 5 metric tonnes in 2007.

    Furthermore,in 1967 Portugal and italy the average of CO2 emission
    started from 1.5 metric tonne and 4 metric tonnes, where both countries increased moderately,from
    1997 to 2007 portugal remain steady approxmimately 5.5 metric tonnes and in the
    same years italy remain constant almost 8 metric tonnes in mean.

  2. Hi, dear, would you mind giving some corrections and band score for my writing, thank you!

    The line chart compares the amounts of per-capita carbon dioxide emissions in four different countries from 1967 to 2007.

    It is clear that there were significant changes in the amount of carbon dioxide emissions in each country over the period shown. Overall, while the amounts of emissions in Italy and Portugal increased gradually, the figures for the United Kingdom and Sweden fell steadily.

    In 1967, around 10.9 metric tonnes of carbon dioxide was produced by one person in UK, compared to 8.8 metric tonnes in Sweden and 4.4 metric tonnes in Italy. Portugal saw the smallest amount of per-capita carbon dioxide emission, at only 1.2 metric tonnes. Over the following 10 years, the amount of carbon dioxide releasing rose dramatically to a peak of 10.3 metric tonnes in Sweden , and the figures for Italy and Portugal was at around 6.3 metric tonnes and 2.2 metric tonnes respectively, while the figures for UK only show a negligible drop of 0.2 metric tonnes.
    After the year of 1977, the amounts of emissions in UK and Sweden fell gradually over the period of 30 years, while the figures for Italy and Portugal increased steadily over the same period. By 2007, there was approximately 5.5 metric tonnes carbon dioxide per person discharged from Italy and Portugal, whereas united kingdom and Sweden were recorded at 8.9 and 7.5 metric tonnes respectively.

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