The Charts Below Show the Changes in Ownership of Electrical Appliances

Lilie King

Lilie King

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This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 1 Writing Task 1.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Percentage of households with electrical appliances
(1920-2019)

percentage of households with electrical appliances

Number of hours of housework per week,
per household (1920-2019)

number of hours of housework per week

Sample Essay

The first graph displays the percentages of households that owned electrical appliances in one country between 1920 and 2019, while the second graph illustrates how much time households in that country spent doing housework during the same period.

Overall, ownership of all three appliances increased during this period, with that of refrigerators having the greatest growth. At the same time, the amount of time spent on housework decreased.

Washing machines were the most common of the three electrical appliances in 1920, with ownership reaching 40% of the population. This number then rose to about 75% in 2019, with a small dip in 1980. Nearly a third of households owned vacuum cleaners in 1920. Although ownership climbed steadily,  it did not reach 100% until 2000.

In comparison, almost no households had a refrigerator in 1920. However, ownership increased rapidly and by 1980 there was one in every household.

The amount of time spent doing housework, by contrast, first fell significantly from 50 to 15 hours per week between 1920 and 1980. After that, it only experienced a small drop to just over 10 hours a week in 2019.

187 Words

How to Vary Your Language

ownership
  • to own

40% of households in 1920 owned washing machines.

  • to have

40% of households in 1920 had a washing machine.

Common Mistakes

You should not assume that the number of hours of household work declined because people bought household appliances. There is no such information in the charts. We can’t exclude the possibility that people bought appliances because they had less time to work in the home.

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  1. The presented line charts demonstrate the proportion of the householders’ ownership of the electrical appliances and the period spent to finish housework and household in one country over a ninety nine-year. It is evident from the graphs that the percentage of the ownership of the electrical devices increased considerably, while the number of working hours per week declined significantly.
    According to what is shown, in the first graph, the ratio of the householders who owned a refrigerator increased rapidly about 95 per cent throughout the 60 years to constitute 100 per cent by 1980. Meanwhile, the proportion of people who owned a vacuum cleaner climbed significantly from 30 per cent in 1920 to represent 100 per cent by 2000, while the percentage of people who had a washing machine increased slightly from 40 per cent in 1920 to constitute 75 per cent in 2019.
    Apart from this, the number of working hours per week decreased significantly between 1920 and 2019 to comprise 30 hours difference, whereas the number of hours declined slightly from 20 hours per week in 1960 to constitute 10 hours per week in 2019.
    To conclude, we could say that the percentage of ownership of electronic devices in 1920 was less than the proportion in 2019. Meanwhile, the number of working hours per week represented the highest figure in 1920 and the lowest number in 2019.

  2. Hii could u give me a score for my answer? thanks

    This line graph illustrates the shifting in ownership for households in a state of machine tools and the quantity of time consumed for homework from 1920 to 2019.

    Overall, the percentage of ownership all three types of electrical
    appliances had an upward trend during this period, while the quantity
    of time spent on housework was declined steadily over the period.

    In 1920, washing machine is the most popular with 40% owned to facilitate households homework, then the amount fluctuated to nearly 75% in 2019. Besides the refrigerator was the lowest appliance to owned at the begins, whereby there changed significantly over 100% from 1980 to 2019,
    likewise, the vacuum cleaner has risen suddenly get 100% from 2000 to 2019, which was only 30% in 1920.

    In addition over that period, there is a downward trend in hours weekly of doing household, started by 50 hours in 1920 and fallen gradually roughly only 11 hours weekly in 2019.

  3. Hello, please could I get feedback on my writing.

    The first line chart illustrates the changing in the presence of different electrical appliances in households, and the second one present an amount of time spent weekly on housework between the year 1920 and 2019
    Overall, we can see clearly that the percentage of all electrical appliances have increased differently on the given years, in parallel its clear that the increasing in electrical appliances affected the time spent on housework as its clear in the second graph where the number of hours of housework decreases sharply.
    To begin, the percentage of refrigerator was about 0% in 1920, but then it peaked dramatically to 100 % in 1980, similarly for the Vacuum cleaner percentage which climbed enormously from 30 % to 100 % in 2000, as for the washing machine percentage the numbers where fluctuating, the percentage was 40 % in 1920 and then it rose considerably to 70% in 1960, and it fell slightly to about 62 % in 1980, but after that it return to escalate to 72 % in 2019
    On the other hand, its noticeable that the number of hours of housework per week declined heavily from 50 hours in 1920 to 20% in 1960 and then it keeps falling moderately to 10 % in 2019

  4. Hi, Could you please check and give me a band score? I really appreciate it.
    Sincerely.

    Given are two graphs providing a comparison of changes of using electrical machines in the certain country during the period from 1920 and 2019 as well as time spending on housework in this country.

    Overall, it is evident from the information supplied by the first graph that all of the different electrical machines rose considerably over the period shown. Also noteworthy is the fact that the total number of time spending on housework per week in each family declined gradually at the same period.

    As shown in the first line graph, From a negligible 0 percentage, the refrigerator soared to 100 percent from 1920 to 1980. It then stayed at this level by the end of the period. The percentage of washing machines went up gradually almost every year except for a small dip from 1960 to 1980. In contrast to vacuum cleaners, it stood at 30 percent in 1920. It then climbed steadily to 100 percentage in 2000, before remaining constant at this level over 19 years.

    The second graph indicated that people took less time doing housework. Declining impressively from 50 percent in 1920 to 20 percentage in 1960, then decreased gradually to a low of just 10 percent over 59 years.

  5. what should I do to write a shorter essay?

    The line graph demonstrates the dynamic changes in the percentage of electrical appliances owning by a family and the number of hours of housework on a weekly basis between 1920 and 2019 in a certain country.

    It is clear that the percentage of electrical appliances ownership in each family increased dramatically over the period shown. When we look at the amount of time people spent on the housework, a steady fall could be seen in the second chart over the same period of 100 years.

    In 1920, less than 5% of family in this country owned refrigerators, while the figures for washing machines and vacuum cleaners were about 40% and 30% respectively. Over the following 60 years, the percentage of family with refrigerators increased dramatically, reaching at 100% at early 1980, and a steady rise of about 60 % could be found in the proportion of vacuum cleaner owning family. Interestingly, there was a relatively slow rise in the percentage of family with washing machines from 1920 to 1960 in comparison with the vacuum cleaner, but a small drop of approximately 9% could be found in this figure over the following 20 years till to 1980.

    When we look at the amount of time people did the housework in a week from 1920 to 2019, The figure saw a plummet from 50% in 1920 to only 20% in 1960. After 1960, the quantity of time spending on housework fluctuated between 10 hours and 20 hours a week till to its lowest point at around 10 hours a week in 2019.

  6. Hi.. please give corrections and band score..
    The given line graphs depicts the percentage of house holds using different kinds of electric equipments and the weekly hours spent on the household chores over a little less than a century.
    Overall, there was an increase in the number of houses using the appliances, that of refrigerators being the highest and a decline in the time spent on house activities.

    In 1920, the usage of washing machine and vacuum cleaner was below 50%, where as, that of refrigerator was almost zero. Over the next 20 years, there was a dramatic incline to 90% in the usage of refrigerators. By 1980 it rose to 100%, and use of vacuum cleaner also increased to 90%. On the other hand that of washing machine declined slightly. Furthermore, by 2019, 100% of the houses were dependent on refrigerators and vacuum cleaner, but still, only 72% were using washing machines.

    The house tasks required 50 hours per week in 1920. It dropped drastically to 20 hours/week by 1960 and kept declining further. Even though it plateaued from 1980 to 2000, by 2019 the duration needed went down to 10 hours/week.

  7. Please assess this task and provide me feedback Ma’am.

    The provided line graphs illustrate information about the percentages of households that owned three electrical appliances and amount of time spent having several activities in a country from 1920 to 2019.
    According to the statistics, the percentage of owning Refrigerator stood at 0% in 1920 which is less than washing machine and vaccum cleaner, about 30% and 40% respectively. the ownership of refrigerator increased the most by around 90% in the next 4 decades whereas the others (Washing machine and Vacuum cleaner) stood the same at 70%. In 1980, there was a slight increase of the owner of refrigerator (by 10%) and similarly the percentage of the owner of Vacuum cleaner rose by 20% but it dropped by about 5% in terms of Washing machine. The ownership of refrigerator remained constant for the final 20 years while owner of Vaccum cleaner augmented from 1980 to 2000 and stood at 100% between 2000 and 2019. The ownership of Washing machine went up by almost 10% in the final 4 decades.
    On the other side, the number of hours spent doing household tasks weekly plunged dramatically from 50 hours to almost 10 hours over a period of 100 years.
    To sum up, The ownership of refrigerator and Vacuum cleaner grew the most between 1920 and 2019 and the amount of time spent on housework reduced noticeably.

  8. The two charts illustrate the proportion of the electric appliances and the period of time spent per week doing housework in a country since 1920 with projections through 2019.
    Overall, it can be seen that ownership of all three appliances increased during the period. The proportion of the refrigerator was the highest among the others. At the same time, the amount of time spent on housework decreased.
    The first graph displays that the washing machine was the most commonly used in the beginning year in 1920. In 1920, the lowest percentage of ownership of refrigerators proportion of households with refrigerators increased significantly to 90 percent. The proportion of households with refrigerators increased to the peak, which was one hundred percent and remained constant until 2019.
    The amount of time spent doing housework gradually decreased by approximately 10 hours. In 1920, the number of people spent on housework was 50 hours per week and the amount of time spent dropped to 10 hours per week in 2019, which means people did less on housework.

  9. Hi, Could you please check and mark? I really appreciate it.
    Sincerely.
    Housework and Electrical Appliances
    One of the necessities for a household is electrical appliances. The charts demonstrate the differences in ownership of electrical appliances (like washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner) and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
    First of all, the first chart shows that usage of electrical appliances as a percentage increase between these years. Moreover, the sharpest rising is refrigerator that of these appliances until 1960. On the other hand, increasing of vacuum cleaner’s percentage is the highest after that time. Besides, usage of refrigerator and vacuum cleaner in 2019 is much more than washing machine.
    Secondly, the second chart demonstrate that the more electrical appliances develop, the less hours for housework spend. Also, only 10 hours per week need in 2019.
    Time is spent for housework for years. At that time, electrical appliances are advantages in terms of spending time for house.

  10. The line charts compare the percentage of households that owned these three different electrical appliances and the hours spent doing housework per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.

    In general, there was an increasing trend for all three types of electrical appliances that were bought by households during the period shown, especially for refrigerators. However, the number of hours of housework per week declined from year to year.

    In the beginning, almost no households bought refrigerators and the most popular electrical appliance was the washing machine which was bought by 40% of households. The vacuum cleaner has the second most costumers, there were 30% households owned it at 1920. Then, refrigerators increase dramatically and reached 100% in 1980 and 80% of households bought vacuum cleaners meanwhile. However, washing machines faced a temporary decrease in 1980 and only 60% of households owned them. And it increased after this year to reach 65% in 2019. After 2000, every household in this country had a refrigerator and vacuum cleaner.

    In 1920, households spent 50 hours per week on housework. After a heavy decrease, there were only 20 hours which was less half than the past spent on housework per week per household. Between 1980 and 2000, the amount of time of housework at the same level that is 15 hours per week. And it continually reducing to 10 hours in 2019.

  11. The line charts provide information on the proportion of households with three electrical appliances (washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner) in a certain country between 1920 and 2019 and the amount of time spent on household chores per week during the same period.
    Overall, possession of all three electrical appliances shows an increasing trend, while the number of hours of housework undertaken is decreasing steadily. Another remarkable point is that as of 2000, both refrigerators and vacuum cleaners are available in all households.
    In both charts, most of the momentum is seen between 1920 and 1960. While in 1920 almost no household had a refrigerator and few houses had a vacuum cleaner and a washing machine (30% and 40% respectively), refrigerator ownership rocketed, 90% by 1960, followed by vacuum cleaner and washing machine at 70%. In the meantime, it is seen that the amount of time spent on housework decreased by 30 hours during this period to 20 hours per week.
    Despite the fluctuation in washing machine ownership around 1980, the dominant trend continues in both graphs after 1960. Refrigerator ownership reached 100% in 1980, followed by vacuum cleaners in 2000. As of 2019, all households in the country in question, have a refrigerator and vacuum cleaner, while washing machine ownership barely increases in this period (just over 70%). Also, it is seen that the time spent on housework decreases to 10 hours a week in the last 59 years.

  12. The chart illustrates the changes in possession of electrical equipments and the amount of time spent on domestic chores in families in a certain country between 1920 and 2019

    Overall, there is a significant rise in the percentage of household with washing machine, Refrigerator and vacuum cleaner within this period. On the other hand, the number of hours per week in which families spend on washing of clothes, preparing meals and cleaning has dropped over the years

    In 1920, 0% of families owned a Refrigerator, However this rose significantly to about 90% in 1960 and remained constant (at 100%)between 1980 to 2019. There were more owners of washing machine and vacuum cleaner in the country in 1920 at 40 and 30% respectively. The number of households with washing machine was 10% higher than those with a vacuum cleaner between 1920 to 1940 but by 1960, the number of families with vacuum cleaner overtook those with washing machine and by the end of 2019 about 100% of people had vacuum cleaner while the number of household with washing machine remained at about 71%

    Meanwhile, the number of hours spent on domestic chores by families consistently dropped over the years from spending about 50% hours each week in 1920 to 10% in 2019

    1. Sorry for the late reply. I think you can get a 6.

      When constructing sentences, you use either “refrigeratorS” or “A refrigerator”, not “refrigerator”. The same is true of “washing machine” and “vacuum cleaner”.

      In the second chart, the Y-axis shows hours per week, not percentage. To avoid repeating “hours”, you can use “amount of time” as the subject of your sentence.

      Meanwhile, the number of hours AMOUNT OF TIME spent on domestic chores by families consistently dropped over the years from spending about 50% hours each week in 1920 to 10% HOURS in 2019.

  13. Hi, I have just written for the first chart, could you please mark this one? I really appreciate it.
    The line graph compares the proportion of families owning home appliances including washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner in one country from 1920 to 2019. Overall, all these electrical appliances increased in any given year and the refrigerator had the greatest growth. Another striking feature is that at the end of the period, both the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner were on the top with 100%.

    In 1920, about 40% of washing machine was owned by households and this was even higher than the figures for the refrigerator (1%) and vacuum cleaner (30%) combined. Throughout sixty years, the percentage of households who owned refrigerator experienced a significant rise and hit a peak of 100% in 1980, then remained unchanged. In this year, the vacuum cleaner also gained substantial popularity with 90% of ownership, whereas the figure for washing machine reached just over 60%.

    Between 1980 and 2019, the percentage of refrigerators remained constant, while the figures for other electrical appliances increased slightly to between 70 and 100% in 2019.

    1. I think your essay is hard to follow because you made too many comparisons. It could have been much clearer if you had described the three appliances one at a time.

      ✖️In 1920, about 40% of washing machine was owned by households…
      ✔️In 1920, about 40% of households owned a washing machine…
      It’s not 40% of washing machines. It’s 40% of households. Also, when constructing sentences, you either use “washing machineS”, or use “A washing machine”.

      ✖️Overall, all these electrical appliances increased…
      ✔️Overall, ownership of these electrical appliances increased…
      These appliances didn’t increase. Ownership of these appliances did.

      ✖️…the vacuum cleaner also gained substantial popularity with 90% of ownership…
      ✔️…, with ownership standing at/reaching 90%

      Between 1980 and 2019, the percentage of HOUSEHOLDS THAT OWNED refrigerators remained constant, while the figures for THE other TWO electrical appliances increased slightly to between FROM 70[%] and TO 100% in 2019.

  14. The graphs illustrate the percentages of three electrical appliances (washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner) and the number of hours of housekeeping per week. The data shown are from 1920 to 2019.
    Overall, the use of all electrical appliances showed an increasing trend throughout the given period, whereas the amount of time spent on chores done in houses declined steadily. Moreover, as of the year 2000, all households in the given country had both refrigerators and vacuum cleaners.
    The percentage of households having electrical machines significantly rose. In 1920, refrigerators in houses were just above 0%, through the next 40 years, it had a dramatic increase reaching 90% in 1960 before plateauing at 100% in 1980. Similarly, vacuum cleaners surged from 30% to 90% in 1920 and 1980 respectively. Although washing machines were the most used appliance among others and were found in 40% of the households in 1920, its slow growth rate with few fluctuations made it the least percentage with just above 70% in 2019.
    With the rise shown in electrical devices, there was an evident drop in the number of hours weekly spent on housework wherein 1920, the housework consumed 50 hours per week and had a gradual decline to reach approximately only 10 hours per week in 2019.

    1. See the corrections below.

      The graphs illustrate the percentages of HOUSEHOLDS THAT OWNED three electrical appliances (washing machineS, refrigeratorS and vacuum cleanerS) and the number of hours of housekeeping per week. The data shown are from 1920 to 2019.

      Overall, the use OWNERSHIP (How do you know they used those appliances? Maybe they bought them but never used them.) of all electrical appliances showed an increasing trend throughout the given period, whereas the amount of time spent on chores done in houses AROUND THE HOUSE declined steadily. Moreover, as of the year SINCE 2000, all households in the given country COUNTRIES had both refrigerators and vacuum cleaners.

      The percentage of households having electrical machines significantly rose. In 1920, refrigerators in houses were STOOD AT just above 0% in 1920, through. During the next 40 years, it had a dramatic increase, reaching 90% in 1960 before plateauing at 100% in 1980. Similarly, vacuum cleaners surged from 30% to 90% in BETWEEN 1920 and 1980 respectively. Although washing machines were the most used appliance COMMON among others OF THE THREE APPLIANCES and were found in 40% of the households in 1920, its their slow growth rate with few fluctuations made it them the least percentage COMMON APPLIANCES, with just above 70% in 2019.

      With the rise shown in electrical devices, there was an evident drop in the number of hours weekly spent on housework wherein 1920,(You shouldn’t assume that the number of hours of household work declined because people bought household appliances) the housework consumed 50 hours per week and had a gradual decline to reach approximately only 10 hours per week in 2019. (Housework didn’t decline. The amount of time spent on housework did.)

      I think you can get a 6-6.5.

  15. The first graph displays the persentage of three electrical applianes such as washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner while the socond graph illustrates how much time hoiseholds spent doing hoisework in a country from 1920 to 2019.

    Overall it is clear that all type of appliances increased during this period and at the same time the amount time spent on housework decreased.

    Washing machine and vacuu cleaner were common used device with reaching 40% and 30% in 1920. After twenty years the value of both devices rose twice (60% and 50%) respectively. In 2019 the proportion of washing machine make up 75% with a small dip in 1980. However ownership of vacuum cleaner climbed significiantly to 100% in 2019.

    In comparison, although there is no refrigerator in households in 1920, after thirty years it grews up 90% and 10% in 2019.

    The amount of time spent washing, preparing food and cleaning fell rapidly from 50 to 15 hours between 1920 and 1980. After that, it experinced only one in ten in 2019.

      1. Hi, you need to be very careful with the subjects of your sentences when describing the first chart.

        ✖️The first graph displays the percentage of three electrical appliances…
        ✔️….the percentage of HOUSEHOLDS OWNING electrical appliances…

        ✖️…all type of appliances increased during this period…
        ✔️…OWNERSHIP of all three appliances increased…

        ✖️In 2019 the proportion of washing machine make up 75% with a small dip in 1980.
        ✔️In 2019 the proportion of HOUSEHOLDS THAT OWNED washing machineS STOOD AT 75%…

        ✖️Washing machine and vacuu cleaner were common used device with reaching 40% and 30% in 1920.
        ✔️Washing machineS and vacuum cleanerS were commonLY used deviceS with OWNERSHIP reaching 40% and 30% RESPECTIVELY in 1920.

        ✖️After twenty years the value of both devices rose twice (60% and 50%) respectively.
        They did not rose TWICE!

        In your fourth paragraph, tenses are all wrong.

        ✖️After that, it experinced only one in ten in 2019.
        “10 hours” does not mean one in ten.

        You really need to work on your grammar. Sorry, I can only give your essay a 5.

  16. Hi again, Could you please mark this one too? I really appreciate it.

    The first line graph illustrates the proportion of households with electrical appliances such as washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuums. The second graph demonstrates the amount of time the people use per week per household in 1920 and 2019.

    Overall, we clearly can be seen that the number of hours of use is drastically increased while the proportion of having a dishwasher, refrigerator and vacuum rocketed rose.

    In the beginning, in 1920, none of the households didn’t have a refrigerator, but in the same year, the washing machine and vacuum figure stood between 30-40 %. On the other hand, 20 years later, in 1940, all 3 stuff had the almost same amount of value in people’s homes, around 50-60%. After this year, from 1960 until 2019, the percentage of the refrigerator and vacuum steadily grew to 100%, but in the same year, the figure of the washing machine sat at 85%, and it was the lowest number in that year.

    Moving on, in the second graph, in 1920, had the highest proportion of using the stuff at home, with 50 hours per week. Moreover, we can see the number of household users daily fell in 1960, sat in 20 hours per week then, 1980, and 200 was almost plateaued around 15 hours per week. Also, in the last year 2019, the figure stood at 10 hours in the week.

    1. It seems that you misunderstood the second chart. It isn’t about the amount of time that people spent using those household appliances. It’s about the amount of time that people spent DOING HOUSEWORK. You don’t know whether they did housework using those appliances or not. Therefore, your description of the second chart is very inaccurate.

      ✖️…the proportion of having a dishwasher, refrigerator and vacuum rocketed rose.
      ✔️…the proportionS of HOUSEHOLDS having a WASHING MACHINE, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner ROCKETED.
      A washing machine is a machine for washing clothes. Why did you use ‘dishwasher’?
      Don’t use ‘rocket’ and ‘rise’ at the same time. ‘To rocket’ means to rise very rapidly. ‘Rocket’ is a verb here.

      ✖️…in 1920, none of the households didn’t have a refrigerator…
      Your sentence means that all households had a refrigerator, but in fact none of them owned one.

      ✖️…the washing machine and vacuum figure stood between 30-40%.
      ✔️The FIGURES FOR washing machines and vacuum cleaners stood between 30% AND 40%.

      ✖️…in 1940, all 3 stuff had the almost same amount of value in people’s homes, around 50-60%.
      What do you mean by “they had the same amount of VALUE IN PEOPLE’S HOMES”? Why not just use the original wording ‘ownership’?

      ✖️…the percentage of the refrigerator and vacuum steadily grew to 100%…
      ✔️…the percentageS of HOUSEHOLDS THAT OWNED A refrigerator and vacuum cleaner…

      1. Thanks for your quick response. It was helpful. But at the end of the second chart in front of HOUSEWORK, they have written these three options.

        ‏* housework = washing clothes, preparing meals, cleaning

      2. housework = washing clothes, preparing meals, cleaning
        Housework ≠ washing machines, refrigerators, vacuum cleaners

        The title of the second chart is “number of hours of housework per week”. If you replace “housework” with “washing clothes”, “preparing meals”, and “cleaning”, then you have “the number of hours spent washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning”. That is “the number of hours spent doing housework”. Hope it helps.

    1. Great question! ‘Per week’ is the standard way of presenting such quantitative information in that kind of context – like “miles per hour” or “pounds per square inch”, etc. The other two may be fine in conversation but not here.

      1. How many ownership of three different electrical devices in a house in a country in one less a hundred year starting in 1920 is delineated in the initial picture while how much time spending on doing housework per house in that country is described in the next pictorial at the same time.

        Overall, it is lucid from the graphs shown that the ownership of tools mentioned are uplifted sharply, whereas the time spending on doing house chores is dropped slightly in year to year.

        Looking at the amount of households with electrical appliances in more details, in 1920, the most popular appliance was the washing machine with two-fifth and that jumped minimally in the years supplied, but it lost its own adventage at the end. Subsequently, the other device, refrigerator, at the start was owned by none. Therefore, this proportion was changed dramatically in the span of years and registered the highest number from 1980 to the finish. As a result, every house owned this appliance. The last appliance, vacuum cleaner, starting with less than a third rose significantly and gained as high as refrigerator in 2000.

        Getting turn the amount of hours of house chores per week and per family, the ratio of housework such as washing clothes, preparing meals, cleaning and so on collapsed gradually by 40 hours in the period except a stability from 1980 to 2000.

      2. Your introduction is way too complicated. You don’t have to change every word in order to paraphrase something. Your long subjects are not idiomatic at all. I suggest you simply say the first graph displays…, while the second one illustrates…

        The overview: I suggest you stop using ‘it is lucid from the graphs shown that’.
        It should be “time spent doing housework”, not “time spending on doing housework”. The time actually dropped SIGNIFICANTLY, not SLIGHTLY.
        The tenses are all wrong.

        Details paragraph 1: It should be “PERCENTAGE/PROPORTION of households”, not “AMOUNT of households”.
        You only included one figure for the washing machine. That’s not enough.
        Do not use terms like “lost its own advantage”.

        Details Paragraph 2: It should be “NUMBER of hours”, not “AMOUNT of hours”.
        Do not change ‘household’ to ‘family. They do not mean the same.
        What do you mean by ‘the RATIO of housework’?
        Again, you have only one figure in this paragraph.
        Sorry, I have to give it a 5.

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