It Is Important for Children to Learn

Lilie King

Lilie King

Scored a 7 on the Writing Test Twice

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 10 Test 1 Writing Task 2.

Sample Essay

Learning to distinguish right from wrong at an early age is of great importance for children. To help them learn the difference, punishment is necessary. I completely agree with this point of view because getting punished is equivalent to facing the consequences of one’s bad behavior. However, only mild punishments should be allowed.

Punishment shows children their misbehavior has consequences. Take for example teenage boys who bully disadvantaged kids at school. Not punishing them amounts to encouraging their bullying behavior. This leads them to believe that they don’t need to respect their peers from low-income families. Punishment, by contrast, helps them realize their mistakes and that there are consequences of them. As a result, they may very likely stop bullying others; otherwise, they will deal with the consequences again.

However, only mild punishments should be used to discipline children. At a young age, children can be very rebellious. So, if parents scold or spank them for their misbehavior, they may become even more rebellious. Instead, parents can use mild punishments, such as taking away children’s pocket money and asking them to do household chores, and at the same time educate them about why they receive the punishments. These methods are unlikely to hurt their feelings and make them rebel more.

In conclusion, children should be punished if they misbehave because this lets them know bad behavior brings bad consequences. However, it is important to take care to not hurt their feelings; therefore, only mild punishments can be used to help them learn to tell right from wrong.

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How to Paraphrase “Learn the Difference Between Right and Wrong”

  • distinguish/tell right from wrong

You can change it to “distinguish/tell right from wrong” in your paraphrase of the question statement. You can also use these expressions in your body paragraphs to vary your language:

  • build good behavior
  • misbehavior
  • to misbehave
  • to discipline children
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