It Is Important for Children to Learn
Written by Lilie
7.5 in Academic Writing
May 30, 2021
It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 10 Test 1 Writing Task 2.
Sample Essay
Learning to distinguish right from wrong at an early age is of great importance for children. To help them learn the difference, punishment is necessary. I completely agree with this point of view because getting punished is equivalent to facing the consequences of one’s bad behavior. However, only mild punishments should be allowed.
Punishment shows children their misbehavior has consequences. Take, for example, teenage boys who bully disadvantaged kids at school. Not punishing them amounts to encouraging their bullying behavior. This leads them to believe that they do not need to respect their peers from low-income families. Punishment, by contrast, helps them realize their mistakes and that there are consequences of them. As a result, they may very likely stop bullying others; otherwise, they will deal with the consequences again.
However, only mild punishments should be used to discipline children. At a young age, children could be very rebellious. So, if parents and teachers scold or spank them for their misbehavior, they might become even more rebellious. It would be better to use mild punishments, such as taking away children’s pocket money and asking them to do household chores, and at the same time educate them about why they receive the punishments. These methods are unlikely to hurt their feelings and make them rebel more.
In conclusion, children should be punished if they misbehave because this lets them know bad behavior brings bad consequences. However, it is important to take care not to hurt their feelings; therefore, only mild punishments should be used to help them learn to tell right from wrong. (262 Words)
How to Paraphrase “Learn the Difference Between Right and Wrong”
You can use “distinguish/tell right from wrong” in your paraphrase of the question statement. You can also use the expressions below in your body paragraphs to vary your language:
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hi lillie, i am so grateful for this website. one can easily access any IELTS essay. the way you attempt an essay while fully focusing on the task response, leave me speechless i must say every time. thank you so much
hey again. Thank you for your sample answer. While I was practicing this question, I wrote: That child may not understand what she or he does wrong, which can be improved by punishment. do you think I am allowed to write “she or he” as I did? Thank you.
Yes, you can use ‘he or she’ but I think ‘they’ is better. Have you watched this short video? https://youtube.com/shorts/KA_VClM41Ek
Interesting that you use contractions and informal words such as “kids” in a formal essay.
I apologize for the “don’t” contraction. I was careless. But whether “kids” or “children” is more appropriate depends on the context. Which do you think reads better: boys bullying children or boys bullying kids?
Hi madam how I can improve my essay writing …
I do a lot of practice but..
Is it opinion essay or discussion essay?
It’s a two-part question.
Hi . At the end of second BP, I think it must be make them rebel less not more. Please check
Hi, thanks for your question. “More” is correct. It should be read as “unlikely to make them rebel more”.
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There are those who trust that punishments should be given to children in-order to learn the right and wrong in early age. Conversely, some believe that punishments are not necessary to be given to children. I strongly agree that punishments are not essential to make the children learn to identify the right and wrong. The reasons for my observation will be given henceforth.
It is important to build disciplined citizens to the society from the schools and the parents. School is a place where a child can gain a variety of knowledge and improve their personality. Punishing is a good way to make them realize their mistakes and to learn the lesson. To exemplify this, Teachers should be able to punish the students if they are not behaving accordingly and not obeying the laws. Harsh punishments like hitting hard or anything that will make them embarrassed should not be allowed. There should be limitations on giving punishments. Otherwise, they will be cruel when they grow up. Therefore, punishments should be given to an extent.
Another vital consideration is that parents too have a responsibility in raising children in a good manner. To be exact, most of the time children learn from their parents. Hence it is important to raise them properly. For an example, in most of the Asian countries parents do punish their children. It is of course to teach them a lesson. However, they punish them with love without harming them such as ignoring them for a while to let them understand what they did wrong. There are some cases reported about child abuse, In such occasions, it is important to save the child and guide them with love. If not they will become dangerous to the society. Thereby, it is important to raise children properly by parents.
As per my perspective, children should be not punished unnecessarily. Instead, they should be guided with love and kindness. Then only that child will learn to treat others with the same way. Unharmful punishments like ignoring them for a while to understand their mistake should be given in-order for them to understand. It important to note that punishments should be given in a wise, unharmful way to make them realize. Most of the western and European scholars agree on this. Hence it is clear that punishments should not be given in an unnecessary manner.
In conclusion, parents and teachers should punish children in such away so that they would not bully or harm other people. Most of the time they should not be punished as not every child learn mistakes in the same way.
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Tnx for your useful vide,but in conclusion we can write( it is imortant to take care to not/ instead of not to) tnx in advance
Yes, “not to” is the way to say it. I corrected it already. Thanks!
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