The Chart Below Shows What Anthropology Graduates

Lilie King

Lilie King

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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 15 Test 4 Writing Task 1.

Destination of Anthropology graduates (from one university)

the chart below shows what Anthropology graduates

Salaries of Anthropology graduates (after 5 years’ work)

salaries of anthropology graduates

Sample Essay

The pie chart displays what one university’s graduating Anthropology students went on to do after completing their undergraduate degree, while the table illustrates how much the anthropologists who found jobs earned after 5 years.

Overall, the majority of the graduates had full-time jobs. In addition, while a significant proportion of the freelance consultants and government employees earned at least $75,000, only roughly half of the private sector employees did.

Just over half of the graduates went on to work full-time, compared with only 15 percent working part-time and 12 percent unemployed. Those who did full-time postgraduate study and those who did postgraduate study while working part-time each only made up a small minority of the graduates, at 8 and 5 percent respectively.

Moving on to their salaries, 80 percent of the freelance consultants earned at least $75,000, half of whom were in the highest salary range of more than $100,000. Although there were also 80 percent of the government employees making no less than $75,000, a relatively high proportion of the government employees, at 50 percent, earned at least $100,000. In comparison, only 55 percent of those working for private companies made a minimum of $75,000. The proportions of the freelance consultants and government employees who were in the lowest salary bracket of $25,000 to $49,999 both stood at only 5 percent, versus 10 percent for those employed in the private sector.

How to Vary Your Language

full-time work -> to work full-time

52 percent of the graduates worked full-time.

part-time work -> to work part-time

15 percent of the graduates worked part-time.

part-time work+postgrad study

Those who did postgraduate study while working part-time only accounted for 5% of the graduates.

Those who did postgraduate study and also worked part-time only accounted for 5% of the graduates.

Those who did postgraduate study and at the same time had part-time jobs only accounted for 5% of the graduates.

government sector -> government employees

80% of the government employees earned at least $75,000.

private companies -> private sector employees

55% of the private sector employees earned at least $75,000.

$25,000-49,999

5% of the government employees were in the lowest salary range of $25,000 to $49,999.

5% of the government employees earned between $25,000 and $49,999 after 5 years’ work.

$100,000+ -> a minimum of $100,000 /at least $100,000 /no less than $100,000

50% of the government employees made a minimum of $100,000.

How to Group Data

Pie Chart

For the pie chart, I grouped “full-time work”, “part-time work”, and “unemployed” together because they are all about “work”.

I also grouped “full-time postgrad study” and “part-time work+postgrad study” together because they are all about “study”.

I didn’t write about “not known” because this category isn’t important at all.

Table

The table has a lot of data. The key here is to include all three types of employment.

Each type of employment has 4 pieces of data. You can only include 2-3 pieces of data for each type of employment.

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The question below is also about the destinations of graduate students. You can try to answer it using the language learned in this blog post.

10 Responses

  1. Hi Lilie! It would be nice if you can comment on my work.

    The pie graph illustrates what Anthropology students did after the conclusion of their university classes. The table chart compares the amount of money earned by the anthropologists after a working-period of five years in different sectors.

    It’s clear from the pie chart that the biggest proportion of graduates had a full-time job, around one student out of two. According to the table, the government sector provided the highest salary : half of the government employers had an income of at least 100,000 dollars.

    Overall, it’s noticeable that just under three quarter of the anthropology students found a work post-graduation. Most of them had a full time work (52%). One fifth of them had a part-time job : among these people a tiny percentage of 5% continued the studies. Less then one tenth of the group did a full time postgraduation study without a job. However a relevant percentage of 20% of the graduated students didn’t find an occupation.

    As the table shows, there were different incomes according to different types of employment. Although in the government sector the 50% of the employers earned a high salary, in the private companies sector money were distributed more equally.

  2. Hi Lilie! It would be nice if you can comment on my work.

    The destination of graduates who finished their Anthropology undergraduate degree course in a university and the salary statistics of Anthropologists after 5 years of their graduation are illustrated.

    Generally, most of the graduates were employed in a full-time job. Most of the Anthropologists who worked as a freelance consultant and employed in the government sector earn more than $75,000 after their 5 years of work. Employees in the private sector generally paid less.

    Most Anthropology graduates, at 52%, are employed in a full-time job , while 15% of them work part time. Some graduates choose to study postgraduate in both full time and part time manner, each accounted for 8% and 5% respectively. Remarkably, 12% of graduates are unemployed after their graduation.

    After working for 5 years after their graduation, a total of 80% of freelance consultants earn at least $75,000, in which half of them earn more than $100,000. Although the same portion of graduates who worked in the government sector earn no less than $75,000, more of them earn more than $100,000, which account for 50% of all Anthropologists who are employed by the government. Anthropologists who work in private companies, however, are paid less. Only 55% of them earn a minimum of $75,000. Only 20% of both freelance and civil workers, while 45% for those employed in the private sectors, received $25,000 to $74,999.

    Thanka!

    1. I’m very sorry for the late reply.

      Introduction: no native speaker would write such a long subject like the one in your introduction.

      Tense: You need to use the past simple, not the present simple.

      ✖”were employed in a full-time job”
      Please read the blog post to see how to say it correctly

      ✖”Most Anthropology graduates, at 52%, are employed in a full-time job, while 15% of them work part time.”
      “15% of them” means 15% of the 52%, not 15% of Anthropology graduates. Just say “15% of graduates”. Your last paragraph contains this kind of mistake as well.

      ✖”Some graduates choose to study postgraduate in both full time and part time manner, each accounted for 8% and 5% respectively.”
      Two complete sentences can’t be linked by a comma.

      ✖”Only 20% of both freelance and civil workers, while 45% for those employed in the private sectors, received $25,000 to $74,999.”
      “While” is used to link two complete sentences. Change “while” to “and”.

      I think you can get a 5.5 at the most.

  3. Did undergraduates of a particular university upon completing their course of degree is described in the pie chart while the tabular graph provides data on their income after having worked for 5 years.

    Overall, what is readily apparent is that full-time work is preferred by most of the subjects whereas greater amount of salary is offered by government sectors.

    As for the destinations opted for over a half of the graduates chose full-time job through graduating which for bigger than the proportion of part-time workers standing at 15% . However, 12 percent of them still have not found jobs according to their fields. Continuing postgraduates study accounts for eight percent and this ratio also belongs to the undergraduates about whom the information is limited in the survey “unknown”. Only of the anthropologists are carrying simultaneously both part time work and post graduate course.

    Moving to the salaries paid in three sectors, although some of them have similarities, they differentiates concerning the percentage. Half the workers at the sectors of the government earn more than $100K+. Yet in private companies and freelance consultants, 30 and 40% respectively receive this money as a payment. Five percent of freelance consultants as well as undergraduates working for the government are paid less than $50.000 but private companies’ at least a ten workers are satisfied with that amount.

    1. Sorry for the late reply. Have you read my comments on your last essay? Why did you still write your introduction and overview like this?

      Don’t use words like ‘prefer’ and ‘opt for’. You can’t know from the chart if it’s graduates their own preference or choice. Maybe their parents forced them to choose that path. I suggest you use simpler language and focus on accuracy.

      Also, you omitted way too many data in the table.

  4. Hello, I want to ask about the tenses you used in this writing. Why do you use past tense while the charts do not provide any specific time?
    Kindly wait for your answer. Thank you 🙏

    1. Hi, Riri. The question uses the past tense “did”. It says “the chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university DID after…”

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