The Chart Below Shows the Value of One Country’s Exports in Various Categories

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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 14 Test 2 Writing task 1.

Export Earnings (2015-2016)

The Chart Below Shows the Value of One Country’s Exports in Various Categories

 

Sample Essay

The bar graph displays how much one nation’s exports in 5 different categories were worth in 2015 and 2016, while the table illustrates how much export values for the 5 categories changed in percentage terms in 2016 as compared to 2015.

Overall, export earnings increased in 2016, in all the categories except gems and jewellery. In addition, textile exports showed the greatest percentage increase that year.

Petroleum products and engineered goods were the two most valuable exports in both years; their values were around $61 and $58 billion respectively in 2015 and then both went up to approximately $62 billion in 2016. Exports of agricultural products and of textiles also both climbed, to roughly $31 billion. Gems and jewellery, in comparison, was the only sector whose export value fell, from about $44 to $41 billion.

Of the 5 export categories, textile exports showed the largest growth in value, at 15.24 percent. This was followed by engineered goods, petroleum products and agricultural products, whose export values went up by 8.5, 3 and 0.81 percent respectively. The export value of Gems and jewellery, by contrast, experienced a drop, by 5.18 percent.

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How to Vary Your Language

Percentage change -> Change in percentage terms

Example     The table illustrates how much export values for the 5 categories changed in percentage terms.

Value
There are two things that could increase.

1) The amount of textiles (in weight) that are exported (sold to foreign countries)
2) The amount of money that is received from exporting those textiles

So, if you don’t state the measurements, you should use a term that reflects how the data is measured, such as “value” in this case, For example, there are no measurements stated in the overview paraphrase, so the word ‘value’ is needed.

Example     Overall, the values of exports increased in 2016, in all the categories except gems and jewellery.

However, you can omit the world ‘value’ if you state the actual measurements.

Example     Textile exports rose from $25 billion to $32 billion.
(but it would not be wrong to include it)

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