The Chart Below Shows the Value of One Country’s Exports in Various Categories

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 14 Test 2 Writing task 1.

Export Earnings (2015-2016)

the chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories

Sample Essay

The bar graph displays how much one nation’s exports in 5 different categories were worth in 2015 and 2016, while the table illustrates how much export values for the 5 categories changed in percentage terms in 2016 as compared to 2015.

Overall, export earnings increased in 2016, in all the categories except gems and jewellery. In addition, textile exports showed the greatest percentage increase that year.

Petroleum products and engineered goods were the two most valuable exports in both years; their values were around $61 and $58 billion respectively in 2015 and then both went up to approximately $62 billion in 2016. Exports of agricultural products and of textiles also both climbed, to roughly $31 billion. Gems and jewellery, in comparison, was the only sector whose export value fell, from about $44 to $41 billion.

Of the 5 export categories, textile exports showed the largest growth in value, at 15.24 percent. This was followed by engineered goods, petroleum products and agricultural products, whose export values went up by 8.5, 3 and 0.81 percent respectively. The export value of Gems and jewellery, by contrast, experienced a drop, by 5.18 percent.

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How to Vary Your Language

Percentage change -> Change in percentage terms

Example     The table illustrates how much export values for the 5 categories changed in percentage terms.

Value
There are two things that could increase.

1) The amount of textiles (in weight) that are exported (sold to foreign countries)
2) The amount of money that is received from exporting those textiles

So, if you don’t state the measurements, you should use a term that reflects how the data is measured, such as “value” in this case, For example, there are no measurements stated in the overview paraphrase, so the word ‘value’ is needed.

Example     Overall, the values of exports increased in 2016, in all the categories except gems and jewellery.

However, you can omit the world ‘value’ if you state the actual measurements.

Example     Textile exports rose from $25 billion to $32 billion.
(but it would not be wrong to include it)

11 CommentsLeave A Comment

  1. Dear lilie,
    I think it would be preferable to mention “in contrast or however” instead of “in comparison” when gems and jewellery’s trend is described. This is because the two last trend are increased, but this witnesses the opposite trend.

    Best regards

    1. Hi, Masoud. You can use “in contrast” or “in comparison” but “however” doesn’t work. Please check the dictionary. You will find many examples showing how the word is used.

  2. Dear lilie,
    Hi, hope you are great.

    I have a question, which is very important to me.
    Can we give the information about the bar chart and the table together. This is because the table shows the differences between them, which can be found in the bar chart.
    I made a report for the petroleum and testiles goods, as an example:

    “Petroliue products account for the largest export values in 2015 and 2016, both at just over $ 600 billions. Its growth rate, however, was the second least, at 3%. In contrast to petroleum goods, it was textiles that showed the most growth in exports in 2016 compared to last year, making up 15.24%. However, its export in 2016 was still the smallest group, just over $30 billions. ”

    I would appreciate it if you shared your opinion about this approach.

    Sincerely,
    Masoud

    1. Hi, Masoud. In my opinion, your comparisons don’t work. Your description of petroleum products sounds like you’d expect they would have experienced a big increase in value. But, in fact, there’s nothing surprising about their small growth. We want low and stable oil prices, don’t we? I suggest you keep it simple.

      1. Thanks for your reply. You actually don’t need to use synonyms in a task-1 essay. Just use the original wording. Focus on using different sentence constructions instead. You may find the section How to Paraphrase “Carbon Dioxide Emissions” in this blog post helpful.

        Could you be more specific about the verb issues you have?

  3. This chart illustrates value of country’s export in categories like petroleum products, engineered goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textile in between 2015 and 2016 and on the other hand, table reflects the percentage of change in export in the said categories during 2015 and 2016. Overall, it reflects the change of percentage in values and sales of the export.
    In chart, the earning for exporting petroleum products, engineered goods, agriculture products and textiles have been increased in 2016 as compared to 2015. However, only the sale of gems and jewellery has slight reduced during 2016, if we compare from the sales in 2015.
    In table, it reflects percentage change in values of various products during 2015-2016. The highest percentage change in textile which is 15.4%, amongst all other products. Although, the percentage change of export in the category of gems and jewellery is in negative during that period.

  4. Please, kindly help me review this writing.
    The bar chart gives information about a county’s export worth from 5 different categories in two years while the table depicts the change in value percentagewise of the 5 categories in 2016 as compared with 2015.

    Overall, the earnings from export of these commercials increased except in one( Gems and jewelry). Meanwhile, the percentage difference in value of textile was the highest.

    Petroleum products and engineered goods were the most yielding at $60b and $58b each in 2015 and both saw a considerable increase to about $62b and $61b respectively the next year. Similarly, export value of agricultural products and textiles also rose to nearly $32. In contrast, money generated from exporting gems and jewelry fell from $42b to $40b.

    With regards to percentage difference in value between the two years, gems and jewelry decreased with 5.8%. Percentage rise in textile worth was the most significant at 15%. That of petroleum products, engineered goods and agricultural products were 3%,8.5% and 0.18% respectively.

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  5. ** Would you please review it?

    The bar chart compares a countries’ different export industry earnings while the table shows the rate of change from 2015 to 2016.

    Overall, all the five product categories faced some growth in export revenue after 1 year. However, there was a fall in the gems and jewelry sector.

    Petroleum products contributed the most among the other categories making 60 billion dollars in 2015 and saw a 3% increase in the following year. Engineering goods made 58 billion dollars in 2015, making roughly 8.5% more in 2016. Meanwhile, more than 30 billion dollars worth of agricultural products were exported in 2016 thanks to an increase of 0.81% from the year 2015.

    The textiles industry was the one that made the most improvements in selling its products outside the country within one year. In the year 2015, its earnings were around 28 billion dollars which increased by 15.24% and reached more than 30 billion dollars in the subsequent year. In contrast, the number of gems and jewelry products that generated approximately 42 billion dollars in 2015 declined by 5.18%, resulting in a loss of roughly $2 billion over the period.

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