In Spite of the Advances Made in Agriculture

Lilie King

Lilie King

Scored a 7 on the Writing Test Twice

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.

Why is this the case?

What can be done about this problem?

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 13 Test 4 Writing Task 2.

Sample Essay

Even though progress has been made in agriculture, a large number of people around the globe still face hunger. I think poverty is the main culprit in this problem, and developing the economy is how we could solve it.

There are still many people living in poverty. Even though advances in agriculture have greatly improved food output, many people are too poor to afford any. Take India for example. it certainly has some advanced agricultural technologies; otherwise, it wouldn’t have been able to become one of the biggest food producers in the world. However, millions of Indians either have no income or earn less than one dollar a week. Having no money to buy food, these people have to suffer starvation.

To resolve the hunger problem caused by poverty, governments need to focus on growing their economies. Poor people are often unskilled; building a strong economy means even the unskilled can find a job. To achieve this goal, governments can open up their countries to foreign investment. For example, since Amazon entered the Indian market, it has created hundreds of thousands of warehouse jobs for unskilled, local workers. A stable job like this allows the poor to have a steady income to feed themselves and their families.

In conclusion, although technology has increased food production, many people are still starving because they do not have enough money to buy food. To improve this situation, governments need to develop their economies so that even the poorest can find work to feed themselves.

251 Words

How to Paraphrase “Go Hungry”

  • face hunger
  • suffer starvation
  • people are starving
  • the hunger problem

Task Response

Notice that in the second paragraph, I not only explained how poverty can casue the hunger problem, but also addressed “in spite of the advances made in agriculture”.

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6 Responses

  1. It is true that recent years have witnessed remarkable improvements in agricultural sector, while still significant numbers of people suffer from hunger and famine conditions across the globe. I think the main reason is limited practice of agricultural innovations only by developed countries and this can be tackled by economically assisting the underdeveloped countries.
    The principal cause is wealthy nations are taking advantage of agricultural scientific methods. This is because these economically stable countries like Russia, America, and Europe and so on, have been employing genetic engineering techniques which not only grow the crops quickly and faster but also accessible to their residents in abundance. According to World Health Organization developed countries would be producing 5 times more genetically modified food in next few decades and would be the biggest food producers in the world. However; developing nations are still utilizing the old farming methods such as ploughing, sowing and harvesting and irrigation techniques which are not enough to feed the country’s population.
    In order to effectively fight chronic food deprivation and to take the maximum benefit of stat-of-the-art agricultural technology is to provide financial aid and resources economically unstable countries; this can be done purely on humanitarian ground. Funding should be directed towards education, skill development and tools to make weak nations aware about new methods. This would help them in the long run, it would not only enhance the food output but also increases the country’s economy. A country’s economic resilience has a direct effect on its nutritional resilience. By empowering nations to produce their own food, they can be better equipped to handle future food challenges.
    In conclusion, only wealthy countries have been benefited from agricultural advances and making tremendous progress, although the issue can be tackled by helping the underprivileged countries with finance and necessary resources.

  2. Hello,
    Can I suggest for example vertical farming for solving such problem or would it be included in the advancement in technologies that are failing to produce the needed amount of food supply?

    1. It’s hard to tell without seeing your actual writing, but keep in mind that the solution you provide needs to have something to do with the reason you give. Read the first sentence of my third paragraph and you will know what I mean.

  3. Question 1. there are only 4 paragraphs in this essay, is that enough or must 5 paragraphs like the normal essay ? for score 6.5 or above.

    Question 2. types of ielts essay question (task 2):

    -advantages & disadvantages
    -both views
    -agree & disagree and mixed question
    Only these types of question in task 2 right, but please explain to me about mixed question .
    Thank you very much

    1. 1. Four paragraphs are the standard way of writing an IELTS essay. I write five paragraphs only when I have trouble reaching the required minimum word count.
      2. This is a Causes and Solutions essay. You can read more essays of this type here.
      Hope it helps.

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