Some People Think That Parents Should Teach

Lilie King
Written by Lilie

Scored a 7 twice in the writing test

June 13, 2021

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 8 Test 1 Writing Task 2.

Sample Essay

Some people argue that parents should be responsible for teaching children to become good members of society, while others claim that school is where they should learn this. I agree with the former point of view because children’s behavior mirrors that of their parents.

On the one hand, it can be argued that school provides an ideal environment in which to foster good behavior. There, children learn that good acts get rewarded, whereas bad ones get punished. For example, if a child is always helpful to others, they in turn would reciprocate when the child needs a favor. By contrast, bullies would be criticized by their teachers and avoided by their peers. However, I do not think this is a good way for children to learn the difference between right and wrong because, at their age, they may feel overwhelmed by the bad consequences their misbehavior brings.

On the other hand, children tend to imitate their parents’ behavior. Thus, if parents set good examples, moral values and good behavior would come naturally to children. For instance, when a child sees their parents always give a hand to the elderly couple next door, they would pick up on this and help them as well. I think this method is preferable because it creates a loving and caring environment for children to learn to become good community members.

In conclusion, parents should take responsibility for teaching their children to become good members of society, because their behavior is always a reflection of their upbringing. (252 Words)

How to Paraphrase the Question Statement

It’s very difficult to change the individual words in the question statement. Note how I used different grammar to paraphrase it.

Original:
Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

My Paraphrase:
Some people argue that parents should be responsible for teaching children to become good members of society, while others claim that school is where they should learn this.

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  1. A group of people claims that children learn to be a positive person in society by their parents while some folks think school could mainly be effective.
    Logically, family is the first group that every child faces in the first years of his/her life, hence the impact of parents’ behaviors on children’s attitude towards the world is undeniable. In addition, most children start school at 7 ages, so a considerable feature of this situation is that, they complete the first years of their life at home. Rationally, at that age parents teach them how they should respect or react to diversity of situations. As an example, when a child is crying for something unnecessary and his/her parents give him/her that equipment he grows up as a spoilt child which can be a part of his personality in adulthood, while family can teach children how they can optimistically acquire to their desire.
    On the flip side, in the second part of the children’s destinations, the personalities are built up in the school where they find a close friend or a teacher as a popular person for themselves. More than that, according to the psychological resources, children’s thoughts mostly have changed in high school compared with pre-school which is the result of their age duration, and in this age, they are influenced by nobody except their peers. However, in many situations, school is the place where children learn different knowledge so their brains accept most of the points as a lesson at this place.
    As a conclusion for this essay, I would say that I agree with the first vision because if families could introduce themselves as an important part of the children’s lives, they naturally are influenced by them more than school, because a child spends most of his/her life at home, so he is often in touch with his family, also if a school tries to spread a positive attitude to children and if that perspective would be opposite of their families’ thoughts, the school can’t be effective.

  2. On the one hand, it can be argued that school provides an ideal environment in which to foster good behavior. Why “in which” ? On the one hand, it can be argued that school provides an ideal environment to foster good behavior.

    1. ‘In which’ is necessary since things happen in an environment. I believe you can find many example sentences about this usage online.

  3. Thank you, Lilie. Do you think using ‘to become a good citizen’ would be a good idea in this writing to give it more variety?

    1. Hi Basira, I think you can use citizen in your body paragraphs but not in your paraphrase in the introduction. I think that being a good member of society is more than just being a good citizen.

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