The Diagram Below Shows How Instant Noodles Are Manufactured

Lilie King

Lilie King

Scored a 7 on the Writing Test Twice

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 15 Test 3 Writing Task 1.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Manufacturing instant noodles

the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured

Sample Essay

The diagram displays the production of instant noodles.

Overall, it is an automated process that consists of six main stages: mixing raw materials, producing dough strips, making noodle discs, cooking, drying, and packaging.

First of all, flour kept in storage silos is transported to a manufacturing center by truck. There, it is combined with water and oil in a mixer to create dough. The dough then passes through several rollers which knead it until it becomes dough sheets that have a consistent texture and the perfect thickness for instant noodles. Next, the sheets are cut by slitters into dough strips, which are subsequently placed in moulds to form noodle discs.

The discs then go through the cooking process in which they are fried in oil. Once fried, they are cooled and dried before being put into cups along with packets of vegetables and spices. Finally, the cups are labeled and sealed.

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How to Write the Overview

Only summarizing the first and last steps is not enough. Read the examiner’s comment on page 133 of Cambridge IELTS 16.
  • Overall, it is a man-made process consisting of eight stages, beginning with transporting flour to a factory and ending with packaging.👎👎👎
  • Overall, it is an automated process consisting of six main stages: mixing raw materials, producing dough strips, making noodle discs, cooking, drying, and packaging.👍👍👍

How to Avoid Repetition

“Stored” and “storage” in the first sentence sound repetitive. Use “kept” instead.
  1. Flour stored in storage silos is transported to a manufacturing center by truck.👎👎👎
  2. Flour kept in storage silos is transported to a manufacturing center by truck.👍👍👍
“Mixed” and “mixer” in the first sentence sound repetitive. Use “stirred” or “combined” instead.
  1. Flour is mixed with water and oil in a mixer to create dough. 👎👎👎
  2. Flour is stirred with water and oil in a mixer to create dough.👍👍👍
  3. Flour is combined with water and oil in a mixer to create dough.👍👍👍
“Cut” and “cutters” in the first sentence sound repetitive. Use “slitters” instead.
  1. Dough sheets are cut into dough strips by cutters.👎👎👎
  2. Dough sheets are cut into dough strips by slitters.👍👍👍

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5 Responses

  1. The Graph illustrate the process of manufacturing instant noodles from raw materials to final product
    The roadmap of creating this small cup passes by eight linear stages that mainly depend om machinery and automation starting by storing the flour up until labeling the cups and sending them to stores ready to use.
    At the beginning the flour in the trucks is inserted in the storage silos , then the flour is mixed in the mixer after adding water and oil to form the dough sheets that are shaped by passing through some rollers, moving to the fourth step where those sheets are transformed to strips and then to Noodles discs that are put in cooking oil and drying after that, next those dried noodles discs are placed in cups and have some vegetables and spices added to them moving to the 8th and the final step where they label and seal the noodles cups

  2. May i calrify the follwoing points please ,
    1) is it wrong to mentione only the starting and the ending process in the introdution para. BUt to explain in body para.
    2) Can i use pre cokked noodles are sent for packaging and labelling. ? this pre cooked word gives my assumption that its going to be cooked again and is wrong?

    Thanks in advance.
    Take care

    1. 1) It isn’t wrong but won’t get you a high score. Please read the examiner’s comment on page 133 of Cambridge IELTS 16. Just follow the examiner’s advice.
      2) Yes, you can use “pre-cooked”.
      Hope this helps.

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