The Two Maps Below Show an Island Before and After the Construction of Some Tourist Facilities

Lilie King

Lilie King

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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 9 Test 1 Writing Task 1.

the two maps below show an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

Sample Essay

The two maps display an island before and after some tourist facilities were constructed.

Overall, with the construction of different types of facilities, the island has been transformed into a tourist attraction where people can stay, eat, play and easily get around.

The island is about 250 meters long. Before development started, it only had a beach along its western coast and some stands of palms near its eastern and western ends. These natural features remain unchanged after development.

However, two accommodation areas with footpaths have been built in the center and west of the island respectively. The footpaths in the western accommodation area have been extended westward to the beach where people can now go swimming.

Between the two accommodation areas is reception, which is surrounded by a vehicle track. This track connects with the footpaths west of it, and extends northward to a new restaurant and southward to a new pier. The eastern part of the island remains unspoilt.

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How to Write the Overview Paragraph

Overall, with the construction of different types of facilities, the island has been transformed into a tourist attraction where people can stay, eat, play and easily get around.

By “stay”, I mean accommodation. By “eat”, I mean the restaurant. By “play”, I mean the beach where people can now go swimming. By “easily get around”, I mean the pier, vehicle track, and footpaths. I just briefly write about all the new facilities without going into too much detail.

Why I Mentioned the Palm Trees

“The first map is described only briefly”

The quote above is the comment that the examiner gave to the essay in the Cambridge IELTS book.

The candidate mentions the beach and the length of the island in his essay. The only thing he doesn’t mention is those palm trees.  I guess this is what the examine means by “the first map is described only briefly”.

Common Mistakes

“Reception” is not countable. Usually it is just “reception”.  But you could use it attributively, and then the following noun will require an article: “the reception building“.

Incorrect: Between the two accommodation areas is the reception.
Correct:    Between the two accommodation areas is reception.
Correct:    Between the two accommodation areas is the reception building.

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