The Diagram Below Shows the Manufacturing Process for Making Sugar

Lilie King

Lilie King

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This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 2 Writing Task 1.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

How sugar is produced from sugar cane

the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

Sample Essay

The diagram displays how sugar is manufactured from sugar cane.

Overall, it is a man-made, linear process consisting of four main stages: farming, crushing, separating and drying.

The first step is to grow sugar cane and it takes about 12 to 18 months for it to mature. After it has fully grown, it is harvested either manually or mechanically. The manual method involves farmers removing the leaves first and then chopping the stalks, while the mechanized method uses machines to cut the canes directly.

The harvested canes are then crushed in a mill to extract the juice, which later on is purified using a limestone filter. Next, the purified juice is boiled in an evaporator to remove water so that it is concentrated into a syrup. The syrup is then poured into a centrifuge where it is spun at high speed to separate sugar crystals from it. Finally, the crystals are dried and cooled and the end result is sugar.

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How to Write the Overview

Source: Cambridge IELTS 16 Page 133

“Overall, the process consists of seven steps of various time length, starting by farming sugar canes and ending by drying sugar ready to use. 👎👎👎

Here is the examiner’s comment:
There is an overview presented in the first paragraph which summarizes the process into the farming stages and the drying stages. This summary could be more detailed, e.g. farming, crushing, separating and drying stages.”

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Both are correct but “the juice” sounds better. The idea is the juice that is in the canes.
  • The harvested canes are then crushed in a mill to extract juice.
  • The harvested canes are then crushed in a mill to extract the juice. 👍👍👍
Both are correct, and both sound natural. Without “a”, this is describing “syrup” as a specific thing that the juice is directly converted to. With “a”, it suggests that that juice is converted to a syrupy substance/texture. This subtle difference works here because the word “syrup” is ambiguous and refers to many different kinds of thick, sweet liquids.
  • The purified juice is boiled in an evaporator to remove water so that it is concentrated into syrup. 👍
  • the purified juice is boiled in an evaporator to remove water so that it is concentrated into a syrup. 👍
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19 Responses

  1. Could i get a comment to improve my writing skill! Thanks a lot!!!

    The given picture illustrates different stages of the process to yield sugar from sugarcane.

    Overall, sugar production includes 7 steps, starting from the farming, crushing, separating and ending at the drying phase.

    First of all, sugarcane is grown in the 12 to 18 month crop before being mature and harvested in a manual or mechanical way. Harvested sugarcane then witnesses a crushing stage to produce the juice by a specialized machine. To be purified, extracted juice is allowed to flow through a filter which is made out of limestone to become the pure one.

    Water is removed from that pure liquid by heating juice in a evaporator with high temperature in order to become a syrup. After that, a centrifuge is used to separate sugar crystals from syrup by spinning them in the way with high speed. Sugar crystals then need to be dried and cooled to be sugar completely.

  2. The diagram provides insight on sugar production out of sugar cane in seven steps.
    Overall, manufacturing process starts with raw material procurement, which is growing and harvesting sugar canes, and fallowed by transition process into sugar including crushing, purifying juice, evaporator, centrifuge and drying and cooling processes respectively.
    Obtaining sugar canes seems the most time consuming part of this process, with that of 12 to 18 months growing stage. Althought, harvesting duration may vary depending on how much of it done by agricultural machines and/or human labour.
    Harvested canes need to be turned into juice for purifying process by crushing them. After straining the juice from Llimestone Filter, it is ready for the Evaporator which turns juice into syrup by giving heat to the purified juice. On the next step, sugar crystals in the syrup will be separeded with centrifugal force. After that, sugar cyristals will be ready for drying and cooling stage which is the final stage and results with the end product, sugar.

  3. Hi, could I get feedback on my writing?

    The diagram demonstrates the way in which sugar is produced out of sugar cane.

    Overall, this industrial process consists of seven stages, beginning by growing the sugar canes and ending up with leaving the final product, sugar, for some time to dry up.

    First of all, sugar cans, which are the main raw material, are grown and after 12 to 18 months, they get matured and ready for harvesting. Moreover, harvesting is either done by hand or by heavy harvesting trucks. After that, sugar canes are crushed, extracting a sugar cane juice that is then purified using a limestone filter in order to separate the juice from any unwanted solids.

    In the next stage, this juice is converted into syrup by evaporation under high heat. Subsequently, a centrifuge is utilized to separate the needed sugar crystals out from the syrup and finally, the sugar gets ready to be used after putting the sugar crystals aside in a container to dry and cool.

  4. The diagram illustrates the information about the process of creating sugar from sugar cane.
    As can be seen from a broad viewpoint, the sugar creating process involves seven main stages beginning with the growth of the sugar canes and finishing with the completed form of sugar.
    To begin with, sugar cane is grown for a certain period of time from 12 to 18 months to grow and possibly to produce the required amount of sugar specified in production. After the sugar cane has fully grown, the farmer will proceed to harvest the sugarcane in one of two ways including manually with a sickle, or using an automated reaper. After fully harvested, the sugar cane will be put into the extraction machine to make pure juice which later on is purified through the limestone filter.
    The next stage is evaporation, which includes heating the filtered sugar cane juice at high temperature and thickening it into a syrup before being centrifuged to separate sugar crystals with a spinning motor. The penultimate step is to dry and cool these sugar crystals in normal circumstances before getting packaged and sold.

    1. Sorry for the late reply. Your overview paragraph could be more detailed. Please read the “How to Write the Overview” part of this blog post.

      ✖️ including manually with a sickle, or using an automated reaper
      “Including…or…” is incorrect. Use “either…or…” instead.

      In your last paragraph, you said “the next stage is evaporation”, but the “which” clause that follows this statement also described centrifuge. Also, cooling and drying aren’t the penultimate step. They’re the last step. I think you can get a 6.

  5. The diagram depicts the information about the manufacturing of sugar by using various processes.

    It can be clearly seen that in the initial phase sugar canes are grown in the field which require time period of approximately one to one and a half year. Following this, harvesting is done, which is conducted either manually by using sharp knife or by using a machine. Afterwards, the harvested sugarcanes are crushed and converted into usine with the help of a grinding machine.

    Moving further, filtration of the extracted juice is the next step, which is done by pouring the juice onto the limestone fiter. After this, the juice is boiled in an evaporator to make syrup the this syrup undergoes penultimate step of separating sugar crystals from it by using a centrifuge. In culmination, sugar crystals are made suitable for further use with the application of drying and cooling procedures on sugar.

    Overall, the manufacturing of sugar is a linear process, which is successfully completed in seven steps commencing from farming till the drying and cooling of sugar.

    1. In your introduction, why didn’t you mention sugar cane? Sugar can also be derived from sugar beets. It’s important that you say the diagram is about the manufacturing of sugar from SUGAR CANE.

      The name of the plant and the crop is sugar cane. You grow sugar cane (plants) collectively not individual stalks of sugar cane. Therefore, you need to use “sugar cane” (singular), not “sugar canes” (plural) when describing Step 1.

      “which is conducted either manually by using sharp knife or by using a machine” 👎
      You need to punctuate the clause so that it doesn’t read as if “by using a machine” modifies “manually” and not “conducted”: which is conducted either manually, by using a sharp knife, or by using a machine.

      “and converted into usine”
      What do you mean by “usine”?

      “this syrup undergoes penultimate step of separating sugar crystals from it by using a centrifuge” ✖️
      Separating sugar crystals from syrup by using a centrifuge is just one step, so it cannot be part of a multi-step process that has a penultimate step. How about “the syrup undergoes a centrifuging process which is the penultimate step in the manufacture of sugar”?

      “In culmination” is not suitable because it’s too dramatic. Why not simply use “finally”?

      In your overview, you can’t really use “commence” with “from”, because “commence” refers to a fixed point in time, not a duration. Use “start with…and end with…” instead.

      I give it a 6. You have a good command of English. You will do much better If you focus on using natural and idiomatic language rather than so-called ‘big’ vocabulary.

  6. The diagram illustrates a linear process of making sugar by using raw sugar canes.

    Overall, the sugar production based on 7 main stages. The first half of the process includes the cultivation and the harvest of the matured sugar cane tree. The second half contains crushing, separating and drying.

    The first step is the longest process of the manufacture. That is grow sugar canes for 12 to 18 months while fertilized. After it has became matured next step is to harvest the trees either manually or mechanically by using equipment. In the manual method, farmers use a sharp knife to cut the leaves and canes. In the other method, they use a specialized vehicle with sharp blades.

    After harvesting, canes crushed into small pieces through a large grinding mill and make sugar cane juice out of it. Next step is purify the extract juice with the help of a limestone filter. After that, the purified juice boils by using an evaporator then it becomes to a thick syrup without water. To separate the sugar crystals from the sugar cane syrup, it pours into a centrifuge. Finally, sugar crystals send to the drying and cooling barrel. Then, it is ready to packaging and selling.

    1. Hi, be careful with your use of the definite article. Also, when describing a man-made process like this, you should use the passive voice. I think you can get a 6. See my corrections in brackets.

      The diagram illustrates a linear process of making sugar by using raw sugar canes.

      Overall, the sugar production(“sugar production”, not “THE sugar production”) based on(consists of) 7 main stages. The first half of the process includes the cultivation and the harvest of the (remove “the”) matured sugar cane tree (trees). The second half contains crushing, separating and drying.

      The first step is the longest process of the manufacture. That is (to) grow sugar canes for 12 to 18 months while fertilized. After it has became(they have become) matured(, the) next step is to harvest the trees (Replace “the trees” with “them”) either manually or mechanically by using equipment(Remove “by using equipment”. The word “mechanically” already implies the use of equipment). In the manual method, farmers use a sharp knife to cut the leaves and canes. In the other method, they use a specialized vehicle with sharp blades.

      After harvesting(being harvested), (You should use “the” to refer to the canes that have been harvested) canes (are) crushed into small pieces through a large grinding mill and (replace “and” with “to”) make sugar cane juice out of it. Next step is (to) purify the extract (extracted) juice with the help of a limestone filter. After that, the purified juice boils (is boiled) by using an evaporator then(replace “then” with “until”) it becomes to (remove “to”) a thick syrup without water. To separate the sugar crystals from the sugar cane syrup, it pours into a centrifuge(The passive voice is more appropriate here). Finally, (Here, you should use “the” to refer to the crystals produced in the last step) sugar crystals send(are sent) to the drying and cooling barrel. Then, it is ready to (for) packaging and selling.

  7. The diagram below illustrates the process of manufacturing sugar from sugarcane.

    We can see from the process diagram that there are 7 stages in the process diagram of sugarcane. Furthermore, we can see that this process is man-made and is not naturally occurring.

    In the first stage, we can see that the sugarcanes growing in the 12-18 month and after that is time to harvesting in this point some farmers harvest with the harvesting machine and also, some harvesting manually. After that, they send them sugarcane to the factory.

    The third stage is the time for crushing sugarcane in the mill, which is they put the sugarcane in the machine from the top and from the other side bottom the juice comes out. Moving on, now is the time for purifying juice, which they use a limestone filter. Next, they put the juice on the heat to boil it, and the juice becomes a syrup. In the sixth stage, the centrifuge separates the sugar crystal from the syrup. In the end, after drying and cooling, sugar produces.

  8. Stage by stage description of producing for making sugar from sugar cane is coherently depicted in the pictorial shown.
    Overall, it is lucid from the illustration that the process consists several sequence stages commencing with growing sugar cane and completing with draining and caoling sugar crystals.
    Getting back to the details, the sugar canes giving basic ingredient are grew in special fields during one or one and half years. Then, they are harvested either by hand or combine after they are ripe. Next step, sugar canes reaped are crushed in the disticnt mill to making juice. After that, the juice is sterilised with chalk-stone filter.
    The following stages, producing sugar crystals, the juice filtered is boiled in the vaporizer to convert from juice to syrup at specific high temperature. Subsequently, the centrifuge distinguishes sugar crystals from syrup. Lastly, the sugar crystals separated are dried and cooled .

    1. Hi, the issue I see in this essay is that your overview could be more detailed. I’ve updated this blog post. Please read “How to Write the Overview”. Also, the only way you used to express purpose is “to”. Try to use ‘so that’ and “which” clauses to vary your language.

      1. The provided diagram illustrates how sugar is manufactured.What are the process to make sugar from sugarcane.looking from an overall perspective,it is readily Apparent that few step are to be followed to sugar starting from growing to drying and cooling process.

        In detail,for a start,sugar can takes 12 to 18 months sugarcane crops to being mature. Than it harvested in manually aur mechanical way.After it crushing to produce juice by a machine.After that sugar juice need to be purified, the extracted juice flowed through a filter which is limestone filter it purified the sugarcane juice.After words the purified juice are heated an Evaporator to remove water so that it become a sugar syrup. The next step is a centrifuge it used to separates sugar crystals from syrup by spinning them.Finally sugar crystals dried and cooled than the result is sugar.

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