Many Manufactured Food and Drink

Lilie King

Lilie King

Scored a 7 on the Writing Test Twice

Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Do you agree or disagree?

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 3 Writing Task 2.

Sample Essay

Many processed foods and drinks are packed with sugar and this leads to many health issues. I agree that, to reduce sugar consumption, sugar-packed products should be sold at a higher price.

Many people over-consume sugary products because they are cheap. For example, in the United States, many fast-food restaurants offer free refills on sodas. As a result, customers tend to have two or even three sodas at a meal. If these restaurants are required to implement a 20% tax on these drinks and stop supplying free refills, many customers probably wouldn’t order one at all, let alone have a second one. A regulation like this could be extremely effective in terms of preventing obesity among low-income people since many of them are high consumers of cheap sugar-sweetened foods and beverages.

In addition, making high-sugar products more expensive can promote healthier eating choices. This is because if the prices of these products increase to a point at which people are unable to afford them regularly, they may turn to foods that are healthier and more affordable. For instance, if a can of strawberry-flavored beverage costs 3 times the price of a box of fresh strawberries, why not choose the cheaper fresh fruits which can also satisfy a craving for sugar. Although fresh fruits also contain sugars, natural sugars are much healthier than added ones.

In conclusion, sugar-sweetened products should be made more costly to reduce sugar intake. For one thing, the over-consumption of these products is partly because of their low cost. For another, increasing their price could encourage people to choose healthier food.

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How to Paraphrase “Sugary Products”

  • high-sugar products
  • sugar-packed products
  • sugar-sweetened foods and beverages
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4 Responses

  1. Soft drinks that contain a high amount of glucose, is the main cause of numerous diseases for the human body. Authorities ought to take decisions to make them costly to discourage people to avoid using them. I completely agree that this is the best way to avoid such beverages.
    Some Evident drawbacks of using those fizzy and sugary fluids are, it leads to Diabetes and Heart diseases. And the reason for that it contains an excessive amount of carbohydrates that create fat in the body. To illustrate further, the Fat put a strain on the pancreas that creates insulin for the organs which lead to Hyperglycemia. Furthermore, it slows the blood flow in the veins results, in rising blood pressure causing cardiovascular issues.
    Governing bodies should also think for alternatives that are healthy. To illustrate, they should promote the usage of fresh fruit juices and make a few steps so that they are easily obtainable to the consumers and in attractive packings to entice them largely adolescents.
    There must be laws that should apply the taxes on these kinds of products available in the market. Soda drinkables that contain a high amount of carbohydrates should be sold for some extra price. To show you what I mean, if natural fruit juices are going to sell for $1 then they should be trading at the price of $3. That’s how the customer will keep away from those due to its rate. Another way is that ministry should also drive the awareness program so that the buyers should avoid them naturally by knowing their adverse effects.
    In conclusion, high carbohydrate liquid refreshments are not suitable to consume, and they must be intimidated in society and it can be done by making them unaffordable to some extent.

    Kindly comment for my improvement

  2. Please give me your advice, Thank you!

    Many processed food and drink are high in sugar, which lead to many health issues. High-sugar products should be charged with higher tax to encourage people to eat less sugar. This essay agrees with this view because a cheap price is the main reason why so many people are choosing them and this will also promote people to opt for healthier food.

    The principal reason why sugar-packed food should be more expensive is that inexpensive price allow a lot of people to purchase them. This is because when the price of these food is cheap and affordable, people can easily choose them without thinking. As a result, more and more people will consume unhealthy food. However, if the price is higher, people will have to consider the cost and compare with other alternative options before they make decisions on what to buy. For example, in China, many shop owners saw that, after the government increased the tax on sugary drinks, the total sale of those drinks went down.

    Another reason why increasing the price of unhealthy food make sense is that it will promote consuming healthy food. In other words, healthy food in supermarkets are normally more expensive, but if the price of sugary food is increased, and the healthier food remains the same, people will be more likely to choose healthier options. For instance, after Chinese government have imposed higher tax on processed food in supermarkets, a lot of local food markets where lots of fresh goods are available became more popular.

    In conclusion, this essay agrees with that high-sugar food should be more expensive because it will lower the demand of unhealthy food and promote healthier food consumption.

    1. The essay question is about sugary products, not unhealthy food. There is a lot of unhealthy food that doesn’t contain any sugar, such as hamburgers. You’re not on topic when using ‘unhealthy food’.

      I don’t think the example in your first body paragraph has much to do with the main idea of this paragraph.

      “promote people to opt for healthier food”
      It’s grammatically correct but unidiomatic. Use ‘encourage’ instead.

      “inexpensive price allow PRICES ATTRACT a lot of people to purchase them”

      “promote consuming healthy food”
      It’s better to say “promote the consumption of healthy food”.

      “this essay agrees with that high-sugar food should be more expensive”

      Overall, it’s not bad. I think you can get a 6.

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