The Chart Below Shows the Percentage of Male and Female Teachers in Six Different Types

Lilie King

Lilie King

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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational settings in the UK in 2010.

the chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational settings in the UK in 2010

Sample Essay

The bar graph displays the proportions of men and women teaching in six different educational settings in the UK in 2010.

Overall, the proportions of male teachers were greater at higher educational levels while the reverse was true of their female counterparts.

Women made up the vast majority of teaching staff in both pre-schools and primary schools, at roughly 95 and 93 percent respectively, whereas only 5 and 7 percent were male. Even though there was also a higher proportion of women than men teaching in secondary schools, the difference between the two proportions was not significant, at about 55 and 45 percent respectively.

In colleges about half of teachers were male, and the proportion of males teaching in private training institutes was even greater at around 58 percent versus about 42 percent for women. Universities were where male teachers, at around 70 percent, far outnumbered female ones, at approximately 30 percent.

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How to Write the Overview

Version 2 is better than Version 1 because Version 2 covers all six settings whereas Version 1 only covers two of them.

Version 1
Overall, while the percentage of female teachers was higher in pre-schools than in the other five settings, that of male teachers was highest in universities. 👎👎👎

Version 2
Overall, the proportions of male teachers were greater at higher educational levels while the reverse was true of their female counterparts. 👍👍👍

How to Make Comparisons

Note that not only did I compare males teachers with females teachers in each category, I also made comparisons between categories: I described in which categories the differences between males and females are big and in which categories the differences are small.

Compare and Contrast Vocabulary

  • Versus

About 58 percent of teachers in private training institutes were men versus about 42 percent for women.

  • To Outnumber

In universities, male teachers far outnumbered their female counterparts.

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