The Two Maps Below Show Road Access

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 13 Test 1 Writing Task 1.

the two maps below show road access

Sample Essay

The two maps display how road access to a city hospital had changed by 2010 compared with 2007.

Overall, there had not been many changes made, except two new roundabouts, a new car park, and the replacement of the bus stops by a bus station.

Surrounding the hospital was Ring Road, which was connected to City Road by Hospital Road.​ By 2010, two roundabouts had been added, at the junctions of Hospital Road with Ring Road and with City Road respectively.

There was a car park for staff and the public on the southeast side of Ring Road in 2007. However, by 2010, it had become a staff-only car park, and a new public one had been built on the east side of this road.

The bus stops at two sides of Hospital Road were replaced by a large bus station, which had direct access to the two roundabouts.

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How to Paraphrase the Question Statement

The key term ‘road access’ has no good synonyms, so don’t try to change it. Instead, we can use a completely different construction. 

The original uses a noun phrase:
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

We can instead use a “how” clause:
The two maps display how road access to a city hospital had changed by 2010 compared with 2007.

Tense

When describing the changes, I used the past perfect instead of the past simple. This is because all we have is two maps, one from 2007 and one from 2010, and at some time in the intervening period, the layout changed. It could have happened in late 2007, in 2008 or 2009, or in early 2010. If we say “in 2010 the car park became staff-only”, it means the change happened in 2010. That’s why I used the past perfect with ‘by 2010’: by 2010 the car park had become staff-only. 

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  1. The two maps display how road access to the city hospital has been improvised in 2010 compared to 2007.
    Overall, roads near the city hospital had been constructed in a modern way by adding bus stops, roundabouts and separate parking facilities for the staff and public.
    In 2007, there was a ring road around the city hospital. On the south side there was a particular way for a hospital. The hospital road had three bus stops on either side. Nearby the bus stop there was parking available for staff and public. There was a city road located on the south side of the hospital which was connected to the hospital road.
    In 2010, the ring road around the city hospital remained unchanged however an east side of the hospital new separate parking place was built for the public. Bus stop had been demolished and two connected roundabouts had been built. West side of the hospital road one big bus station has been established which also connects to both roundabouts.

  2. Dear Lilie,
    Hope you are doing well.

    As usual, it was a great report, but I have one problem with “respectively” in the text.
    We always use it when there are two things by two other things in a row. But, in that sentence, it was mentioned one thing that connected with other two things. So, it need not have been mentioned the “respectively”.

    Please, correct me if I am wrong.

    I already could not thank you enough for your helpful reports.

    Best regards,
    Masoud

    1. Hi, thanks for the question. I understand what you were asking. Perhaps, you misread my sentence. In that sentence, I do have two things (two roundabouts) connecting with two other things.

      1. Thanks for written this map nicely 💗 first I was confused how can I make this map.then I followed your written map .and I get some new sentence.. thanks 😊

  3. “…at the junctions of Hospital Road with the ring road and with City Road respectively…” why is ‘ring road’ written with lowercase while ‘City Road’ with capital letters?

    1. I saw the road as a ring road (a road that is a ring). But you’re right. I should be consistent and assume the road is named “Ring Road”. Corrected it already. Thanks!

  4. The two map illustrate how road, heading to a city hospital, changed over a 3 year period from 2007 to 2010.
    Overall, it is clear that city hospital and roads still remained, while many changes took place in the intervening years. Bus stops have been converted into bus station and there were public car park and roundabouts added.
    According to both maps, the most notable change is a separately new public car park was constructed on the east of the city hospital in 2010, which was only one area to park car for both staff and public before. The six bus stops that can be seen to the both sides of the hospital road in 2007, no longer existed by 2010, having been transformed into a single bus station on the west side of it. Meanwhile, two roundabouts, leading to the bus station, were be set up at the junctions of it. This was another significant transformation for the hospital road.

  5. The given maps compares the transport facilities in a city hospital between 2007 and 2010.
    At the first glance, it is clear that noticeable improvements have been made in terms of access by public transport and private vehicle.
    It can be seen from the maps that city hospital located on the north side of the city road. The hospital road functions as an access road between main road and the ring road surrounding the hospital. In 2007, there were three bus stops on either side of the access road and a parking lot on the east side shared by personnel and visitors.
    In 2010, roundabouts constructed on cross roads. Bus stops replaced with a large bus station on side of the hospital road, which had direct access to the roundabouts. Shared car park designated to stuff only, however, a new parking space allocated for the visitors on the east side of the hospital.

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