The Two Maps Below Show Road Access to a City Hospital in 2007 and in 2010

Lilie King

Lilie King

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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 13 Test 1 Writing Task 1.

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The two maps display how road access to a city hospital changed between 2007 and 2010. 

Overall, there were not many changes made, except two new roundabouts, a new car park, and the replacement of the bus stops by a bus station.

Surrounding the hospital was a ring road, which was connected to City Road by Hospital Road. By 2010, two roundabouts had been added, at the junctions of Hospital Road with the ring road and with City Road respectively.

There was a car park for staff and the public on the southeast side of the ring road in 2007. However, by 2010, it had become a staff-only car park, and a new public one had been built on the east side of the ring road.

The bus stops at two sides of Hospital Road were replaced by a large bus station, which had direct access to the two roundabouts.

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How to Paraphrase the Question Statement

The key term ‘road access’ has no good synonyms, so don’t try to change it. Instead, we can use a completely different construction. 

The original uses a noun phrase:
The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

We can instead use a “how” clause:
The two maps display how road access to a city hospital changed between 2007 and 2010. 

Tense:

When describing the changes, I used the past perfect instead of the past simple. This is because all we have is two maps, one from 2007 and one from 2010, and at some time in the intervening period, the layout changed. It could have happened in late 2007, in 2008 or 2009, or in early 2010. If we say “in 2010 the car park became staff-only”, it means the change happened in 2010. That’s why I used the past perfect with ‘by 2010’: by 2010 the car park had become staff-only. 

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