The Graph Below Shows the Number of Shops That Closed

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 17 Test 4 Writing Task 1.

Number of shop closures and openings 2011-2018

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed

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Sample Essay

The line graph displays the number of store closings and openings in a single country between the years of 2011 and 2018.

Overall, the number of shops that closed and the number that opened both saw large fluctuations during the specified period of time. However, closings outpaced openings in all years except for 2011 and 2015.

The number of shops that closed fluctuated between roughly 6,000 and 7,000 during the first four years of the period, after which it fell sharply to its lowest point, about 600, in 2015. However, this number rose significantly to approximately 5,000 the following year and stayed at this level until the end of the period. 

In 2011, around 8,500 shops opened, which resulted in 2,000 net openings. After a steep drop down to 4,000 in 2012, openings made a rebound, reaching nearly the same level as closings in 2014 at just over 6,000. This figure then dropped again to its 2012 level in 2015, where it remained until it fell further to an all-time low at 3,000 in 2018. (183 Words)

Closures vs Closings

“Closures” is British English whereas “closings” is American English. I speak American English so I used “closings” throughout the essay.

Except vs Except For vs Except In

They are all correct.
  • Closings outpaced openings in all years except for 2011 and 2015.
  • Closings outpaced openings in all years except in 2011 and 2015.
  • closings outpaced openings in all years except 2011 and 2015.

Should I Describe the Two Lines Separately or Mix Them Together?

The answer is obvious if you think about it from the perspective of a reader. Your essay would be hard to follow if you first compare the two lines, and then go on to describe the first line, and then compare it to the second line again. Therefore, it’s better to separate the two lines into two different paragraphs. But this doesn’t mean that you don’t compare the two lines. Note how I compared them in the last paragraph.

  • In 2011, around 8,500 shops opened, which resulted in 2,000 net openings: the blue part is a comparison between openings and closings because you have to compare them to get the net openings (6000-4000=2000).
  • Openings made a rebound, reaching nearly the same level as closings in 2014.

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  1. The given line graph illustrates the figure for the openings and closing of old and new shops in a country from 2011 to 2018.

    Overall, it is evident that all the stores were opened and closed rate fluctuated during the period. However, shops opening experienced a downward trend.

    On one side of the coin, in 2011, around 8500 shops were opened, then after a year, it went down to around 4000 in 2012. Later on, it rose to 6000 in 2014, however, it started falling below 4000 again between 2014 to 2018 rapidly and managed to reach down to 3000 ends of the period.

    While on the other side of the coin, 6500 stores were shut down and slightly decreased to below 6000 between 2011 and 2012. within a year, the figure experienced an ups and downs trend till 2014. In 2015 a dramatic fall down happened, and the rate of closures became below 1000, but it managed to level up by approximately 5000 in 2016. From 2016 to 2018, the figure remained steady.

  2. Hello, this is Roushanak
    I just write my own answer for the task. It would be great if you can double check my respond.
    The graph illustrates the number of shops that had been opened and closed in a country over a 7-year period. Overall, there was a sharp reduction of shops that had been closed during 2015. On the other hand, the shops that had been opened in 2011 had reached a peak significantly.
    To look more closely, by 2011, more than 6,000 shops had been closed, these numbers had fluctuated till the sharp reduction in 2015. After that, it’s almost fivefold in 2016 compared to previous year. Then, these numbers had been stabled by the end of 2018.
    Meanwhile, the shops that had been opened, reached in a peak around 9,000, then, dramatically had dropped. this number gradually had increased by 2014. At the end of 2018, almost, the number of opened shops had halved compared to four years ago.
    TO sum up, over a 7-year period, many changes had been occurred. Many alters obviously had been observed.

  3. Ma’am.. please tell me about how to improve grammar? And how to improve task 1 in writing!!! I am very worried about it!!!

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