The Plans Below Show a Public Park

Lilie King

Lilie King

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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 14 Test 4 Writing Task 1.

the plans below show a public park

Sample Essay

The maps display the layout of a public park called Grange Park when it initially opened in 1920, and how it looks now.

Overall, the park has been modernized, with some natural features replaced by up-to-date facilities.

There used to be a stage for musicians, two rose gardens, and some seats in the west of the park. However, all of them have been demolished except the rose garden in the northwest. Instead, an amphitheater for concerts has been built. The fountain at the center of the park has been knocked down to make room for a new rose garden and some seats.

The pond for water plants, and the rose garden on the northeast side of the park have been changed into a children’s play area and a cafe, while the glasshouse and seats on the southeast side have been removed so that a water feature can be constructed there.

The park now also has an underground car park, and an entrance has been added to the southeast side of the park to provide access for car park users. The two entrances on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street have remained unchanged.

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How to Paraphrase the Question Statement

It’s impossible to change the keywords “public park”. So I simply added some additional information and used a different grammatical construction.

Original: The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

My paraphrase: The maps display the layout of a public park called Grange Park when it initially opened in 1920, and how it looks now.

How to Avoid Writing Too Many Words

There were a lot of things on the west side of the park.  Some people may first describe the changes to the stage for musicians, then the changes to the seats, then the changes to the two rose gardens. This is too detailed and may lead you to write more than 200 words. Instead, we can group together all the things on the west side and say all of them were removed except the rose garden on the northwest side.

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4 Responses

  1. Have a Question, there is a sentence ” Instead, an amphitheater for concerts has been built. ”
    Want to know the tence of the sentence is correct. Can we use HAS BEEN built or it should be HAD BEEN BUILT.
    please advise.
    Many Thanks.

    1. Thanks for your question. The present perfect is correct. It implies that the building is still here. That is what the diagram tells us: it shows the layout as it is TODAY. The past perfect is incorrect because it would require another specific event in the past, prior to which the building had been completed. There is no such event mentioned or implied.

  2. very well and thanks.
    i have a question!
    for writing task 1 most instructors say to maintain your paragraphs in 3 or 4 sections. but you finish it by 5 paragraph!
    don’t we lose any score if we write in 5 paragraph?
    thanks a lot.

    1. As you can see, most Task 1 essays on this site have only 4 paragraphs. However, every question is different. You need to be flexible. If I combine the last two paragraphs into one, it will be a super long one. Besides, I think it’s better to group the three entrances in a new paragraph. Don’t worry, you won’t lose marks for writing five paragraphs.

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