The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 14 Test 4 Writing Task 1.
The maps display the layout of a public park called Grange Park when it initially opened in 1920, and how it looks now.
Overall, the park has been modernized, with some natural features replaced by up-to-date facilities.
There used to be a stage for musicians, two rose gardens, and some seats in the west of the park. However, all of them have been demolished except the rose garden in the northwest. Instead, an amphitheater for concerts has been built. The fountain at the center of the park has been knocked down to make room for a new rose garden and some seats.
The pond for water plants, and the rose garden on the northeast side of the park have been changed into a children’s play area and a cafe, while the glasshouse and seats on the southeast side have been removed so that a water feature can be constructed there.
The park now also has an underground car park, and an entrance has been added to the southeast side of the park to provide access for car park users. The two entrances on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street have remained unchanged.
How to Paraphrase the Question Statement
It’s impossible to change the keywords “public park”. So I simply added some additional information and used a different grammatical construction.
Original: The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
My paraphrase: The maps display the layout of a public park called Grange Park when it initially opened in 1920, and how it looks now.
How to Avoid Writing Too Many Words
There were a lot of things on the west side of the park. Some people may first describe the changes to the stage for musicians, then the changes to the seats, then the changes to the two rose gardens. This is too detailed and may lead you to write more than 200 words. Instead, we can group together all the things on the west side and say all of them were removed except the rose garden on the northwest side.