The Plans Below Show a Public Park

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 14 Test 4 Writing Task 1.

GRANGE PARK (1920)

Grange Park 1920

GRANGE PARK (today)

grange park today

Important Note

There is no north indicator on the map so I think it’s best not to describe the park by compass direction. I mean don’t use words like north, east, etc. Describing a walk around the park instead.

Sample Essay

The maps display the layout of a public park called Grange Park when it initially opened in 1920, and how it looks now.

Overall, the park has been modernized, with some natural features replaced by up-to-date facilities.

The two entrances on Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street have remained unchanged. However, the park now has an underground car park so a side entrance has been added from Eldon Street immediately to the right of the park to provide access for car park users.

Entering the park from Eldon Street, you will see the rose garden surrounded by seats at the center of the park, the central feature of which used to be a fountain. To your right, there were once a glasshouse and some seats, which have now been replaced by the water feature. Opposite the water feature are the café and children’s play area where there used to be a rose garden and pond for water plants.

A stage for musicians formerly stood on the left side of the park. It has been replaced by the amphitheater for concerts. The only feature that has remained unchanged in this area is the rose garden on the Arnold Avenue side.

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How to Paraphrase the Question Statement

It’s impossible to change the keywords “public park”. So I simply added some additional information and used a different grammatical construction.

Original: The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

My paraphrase: The maps display the layout of a public park called Grange Park when it initially opened in 1920, and how it looks now.

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  1. Hello ma’am, I have a question to you.

    Well, in body 1, there was written info about the unchanged entrances, but in the last paragraph, u wrote ‘The only feature that has remained unchanged in this area is the rose garden’, Why?, I mean, we have entrances too that wasn’t changed.

    Thanks for your answer in advance.

    1. and plus, in body 2, I read ‘you will see the rose garden’, and I guess we can’t use ‘you’ in IELTS writing, because in academic writing, it is inappropriate to use ‘you’, and this is true in IELTS as well,

      1. In theory, we should avoid using “you” in IELTS writing. However, there is no north arrow on the map so it’s better not to use compass terms like northeast and southwest. Instead, we should describe a walk around the park. How are you supposed to do that without using “you”? Remember, it all depends on context.

    2. Hi, thanks for your question. As you can see below, “this area” refers to the left side of the park.

      “A stage for musicians formerly stood on the LEFT SIDE OF THE PARK. It has been replaced by the amphitheater for concerts. The only feature that has remained unchanged in THIS AREA is the rose garden on the Arnold Avenue side.”

  2. Hi ma’am
    if the directions like E, W, N,S aren’t given, can we use the standard one as you did? Won’t it affect our score?

    1. Sorry for the late reply. There is a model answer prepared by an examiner in the book. The examiner does use compass terms so I don’t think you will be penalized for describing the top of the map as north simply because the north indicator is missing. With that said, I do think it’s best not to use compass terms for this task. I rewrote the essay just to be 100% safe. Have a read if you want.

  3. The plans illustrate Grange Park in 1920 and today’s view.
    Overall, Nowadays park has been a car parking area, and the addition there has been more facility for the children’s and music lovers.

    Upon entering through the entrance gate of Eldon street there were a Glass house on the left and Rose garden on the right. After redevelopment there has been only water feature with under ground parking space underneath of it. As move forward there was a fountain between the park which now replace by a rose garden which is surrounded by the seats. Than on the left there was stage that now converted to large theatre for concerts.

    On the other side of enterance near Arnold Avenue the area on left which covered Rose garden and seats has now only garden , while in the corner on the left we have enough children play area with a cafe shop.

  4. Have a Question, there is a sentence ” Instead, an amphitheater for concerts has been built. ”
    Want to know the tence of the sentence is correct. Can we use HAS BEEN built or it should be HAD BEEN BUILT.
    please advise.
    Many Thanks.

    1. Thanks for your question. The present perfect is correct. It implies that the building is still here. That is what the diagram tells us: it shows the layout as it is TODAY. The past perfect is incorrect because it would require another specific event in the past, prior to which the building had been completed. There is no such event mentioned or implied.

  5. very well and thanks.
    i have a question!
    for writing task 1 most instructors say to maintain your paragraphs in 3 or 4 sections. but you finish it by 5 paragraph!
    don’t we lose any score if we write in 5 paragraph?
    thanks a lot.

    1. As you can see, most Task 1 essays on this site have only 4 paragraphs. However, every question is different. You need to be flexible. If I combine the last two paragraphs into one, it will be a super long one. Besides, I think it’s better to group the three entrances in a new paragraph. Don’t worry, you won’t lose marks for writing five paragraphs.

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