The Plans Below Show the Site of an Airport

Lilie King

Lilie King

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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This essay question is from Cambridge IELTS 16 Test 3 Writing Task 1.

SOUTHWEST AIRPORT

the plans below show the site of an airport

Sample Essay

The plans show Southwest Airport now and next year, after redevelopment.

Overall, the airport will be expanded to provide more gates, and the addition of other new facilities will offer more convenience for both departing and arriving passengers.

The departures entrance is on the left as one faces the building. Upon entering, passport control and security can be seen straight ahead. After redevelopment, a bag-drop area will be added in the departures hall, before one goes through passport control. Although the check-in counters will be relocated to make room for the new bag-drop area, they will still be right before passport control. The café, on the other hand, will be moved close to the entrances.

Once through security, passengers will see some shops, which the airport currently doesn’t have. Ahead is the concourse. At the moment, there are 8 gates and passengers may use a moving walkway to get to their boarding gate. Going forward, the airport will have a much longer concourse with 18 gates so the walkway will be replaced by a sky train.

Moving on to the arrivals hall, at present passport control and customs are the only services in the hall. Beginning next year, however, there will be a cafe, ATM machines and car hire arriving passengers can use after clearing the formalities.

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Common Mistakes

If there is no north arrow, you can’t assume which way is north.

On the southwest side of the airport is the departures hall.
✅ The departures entrance is on the left as one faces the building.

After redevelopment, there will be a bag-drop area southwest of passport control.
✅ A bag-drop area will be added in the departures hall, before one goes through passport control.

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16 Responses

  1. The given diagram depicts the developmental plan for South west airport which is indented to be implemented by the coming year.
    Overall, it can be seen that there is a northward extension for new gates and an additional structure of taxi hire added near the exit of the arrivals.

    The check-in port which was on the left side in the old plan will now be moved to the other side, where as the cafe will be shifted to the left side, immediately behind the departure entrance. A new counter for baggage drop will be opened which will be in same line with the cafe. The security and passport control will remain the same, while new shops will be added before the entrance to the gates.
    The walkway in he existing airport will be replaced with sky train and about 10 more gates will be added , hence extending the north part. On arrival side, the passport side and customs will have no change , but a new cafe and ATM will be the added feature of the renovated airport. Towards the exit of the arrivals a car hire will also be started.

  2. Please,please could you give me feedback? I am not going to a course, therefore I can’t take any feedback how how much score I can.

    The layouts illustrate the reconstruction of “Southwest Airport” and how it will be appearance of airport next year.
    Overall, it seems clealry that number of gates will be increased from 8 to 18 after development. The walkway which is seen in the sketch of now look will be removed and instead sky train will be made. Two cafe will be in the airport and one of them will be located in between passport control customs and arrivals, next to ATM. ATM is seen in the airport after restoration. One of the new changes is the car hire which is in the corner after turning left from the arrival entrance. The check-in area will now be directly opposite its current location. The bag drop will be added and it will be between in security passport control and departure, up-left corner. Cafe which is located in up-right corner in the plans of now move to down-left corner after developments.
    In addition, they are going to build a shp in the area that empty at now. As we can see from the layouts, number of entrace of and departure and arrival is going to be doubled.

  3. Hi Lilie,

    Looking for your review, and thank you very much.

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    The two diagrams compare that the layout of Southwest Airport today and a proposed site design for next year.

    It is clear that the main change after development involves the addition of 10 new gates for boarding. The airport then will be able to serve a considerably large volume of departure or arrival passengers.

    If we first look at the pictures on departures, at present, there is only one entrance to departures, Check-in area is on the left, in front of Passport Control and a café is in the opposite position. Once one passed the Security, a Walkway is leading to the 8 boarding gates. After redesign, the addition of a new second entrance to departures will have been constructed beside the main entrance. The café will be reallocated next to the two main entrances. As a new bag drop counter will be built on the site of the original Check-in area, which means a new Check-in will need to be laid. There will be some shops on the left ahead a new Sky train that linking the Security to the 18 gates.

    For arrivals, new facilities will be added on the same side after Customs include a café, ATM Machine and Car Hire counter. Finally, it is noticeable that there will be a new second exit for arriving passengers.

  4. The given plans illustrate how the Southwest Airport will be redeveloped one year after now.
    Overall, it is evident that the number of gate will be expanded and there will be some facilities introduced for the convenience to travellers. Moreover, the security passport control and passport control customs will be unchanged.
    Looking at the given layout, one change that stands out is that one extra door will be added at the both departures and arrivals. It can be seen that in the departure, the check-in will be renovated by bag drop and it will be introduced just under where a cafe is now (top right corner of departure area) and shops will be opened up just after the security passport control. Moving to arrivals, the size of this area will be extended and three new amenities including: cafe, car hire and ATM will be developed.
    The number of gates will be increased twice more than now(8 to 18). The walkway will be knocked down and sky train will be constructed inside gates.

  5. The plans demonstrate the upcoming improvements planned on the southwest airport site, besides, the current plan of the same place. This development will be completed one year from now.
    Overall, according to the developed plan, the airport will become more modernized with more capacity for people and plans and will have new facilities that will ease the trip of the passengers.
    The departure section has only one entrance with a check-in counter in the left and a café on the right, both placed before the passport control area. After the redevelopment, another gate will be introduced with a new bag drop area placed in the place of the check-in will also be reallocated to the left part of the departure section. Similarly, the café will be moved to the left section just near the gates.
    After finishing from the security area, the concourse is found ahead, where only eight gates are built, and a walkway is used to get commuted to their boarding gate. From next year, 10 new gates will be added, and a sky train will replace the walkway as a faster way of transport to the gates.
    The arrival section is simple and doesn’t provide any facilities, but after the redevelopments, this section will become decent. Like the departure section, another gate will be placed. In addition, a café will be available on the left part after the passport control and customs areas, an ATM will be present just beside the café and finally a car hire to facilitate passengers’ departure from the airport.

    Could I get feedback, please?

    1. Your essay is way too long. Usually, when an essay is long, the author gives too many details rather than reporting the main features.

      You didn’t say you are facing passport control so it is incorrect to say the check-in area is on the left and the café is on the right. The use of “left” in your last paragraph is also incorrect.

      ✖gate
      ✔entrance

      “a sky train will replace the walkway as a faster way of transport to the gates”
      How do you know taking the sky train is faster than using the walkway? You’ll have to access the sky train station somehow (it would be outside, wouldn’t it?) and then get back inside so it’s probably not saving you a single step.

      I think you can get a 5 or 5.5.

      1. Thanks for your reply.
        In your opinion, what could I do to improve. Will I get a better Band score if I had removed some information? and in this essay what info could I have removed?

      2. I think the biggest problem in this essay is that as I pointed out in my previous comments, you failed to describe things accurately. If you compare your last paragraph with mine, you will know what I mean by “too many details”. I hope this helps.

  6. The plans show the comparison of the airport’s construction before and after the enhancement.

    Overall, many convenient features will be added in the future development of Southwest Airport including the sophisticated facilities and capacity accommodation which take one year process.

    As we can clearly see, The Southwest Airport mainly consists of two main areas, departures and arrivals with a door, each. Starting next year, it will become double. In the departures, the addition of bag drop will become the noticeably differentiator from current facilities. Check-in place and cafe, on the other hand, will be moved on contrary way. In addition, after passing passport control and security, there will be some shops to gain comfort while waiting. On the other side, towards the arrivals’ area, the cafe, ATM and car hire are the new features which will be faced after passing the administration’s purposes which none of them are currently provided.

    Furthermore, unlike the current condition, the considerable development comes from the top of the building’s structure after renovation providing not only the expansion of the area, but also increasing the number of boarding gates, which are nearly tripled the existing to 18 gates while the walkway’s mechanism will be replaced by sky train.

    1. Be very careful with articles.

      When describing the departures area, you need to choose something as a reference point. For example, I first introduced security and passport control, and then used them as reference points to describe the locations of other facilities.

      The plans show the comparison of the airport’s construction AN AIRPORT’S LAYOUTS before and after the enhancement REDEVELOPMENT (Don’t paraphrase at the expense of accuracy. It’s completely fine to use the original wording) .

      Overall, many convenient features will be added in the future development of Southwest Airport including the sophisticated facilities(a sophisticated facility is a facility with a high degree of complexity. I don’t see any complicated facilities.) and capacity accommodation(What do you mean by “capacity accommodation”?) which take one year process(How do you know the redevelopment will take a year?).

      As we can clearly see, The Southwest Airport mainly consists of two main areas, departures and arrivals with a door, each. Starting next year, it (What does “it” refer to? Door? “The door will become double” doesn’t make any sense) will become double. In the departures, the addition of bag drop will become the noticeably differentiator from current facilities(So, basically you’re saying the addition will become the differentiator from current facilities. What does this even mean?). THE Check-in place and cafe, on the other hand, will be moved on contrary way. In addition, after passing passport control and security, there will be some shops to gain comfort while waiting. On the other side, towards the arrivals’ area IN THE ARRIVAL(S) AREA, the cafe, ATM and car hire are the new features which will be faced ONE CAN SEE after passing the administration’s purposes(“administration purposes”✖️ If you don’t know how to paraphrase, just use the original wording) which (“Which” refers to “purposes”, not ‘new features’) none of them are currently provided.

      Furthermore, unlike the current condition, the considerable development comes from the top(It may look like “top” in the pictures, but the gates area and the departures hall may be on the same floor of the building) of the building’s structure after renovation providing not only the expansion of the area, but also increasing the number of boarding gates, which are nearly tripled the existing to 18 gates while the walkway’s mechanism will be replaced by sky train. (OMG, one paragraph one sentence! :))

  7. The plans illustrate the southwest airport now and how it will change in the next year.

    Overall, we can clearly see many developments and reconstruction and many facilities added in the southwest airport.

    For the began, we have a departures entrance on the left of the building that when passengers enter the building, they can see the passport control and security and a cafe in the corner, in front of the check-in area. Due to the development, the bag drop area will add, and the check-in area will be relocated because of the adding bag drop facilities. Furthermore, the cafe will be moving in the south-west of the hall close to the entrance.

    On the other hand, after the security, travellers will see the shop, which the airport doesn’t have right now. At the moment, there are 8 gates with walkways in the middle. Going forward, the airport will have 18 gates, and the walkways will be converted to the sky train.

    Moving on, in the arrivals hall, at present, there are just passport control and security areas, but in the future, they will be built a cafe and ATM. In addition, cars hire place will be erected.

      1. Introduction: You need “Southwest Airport” instead of “the southwest airport”. In general, the word “airport” forms part of the name of airports so capitalize it. No article is required with most proper nouns.

        Overview: Are there already MANY developments and new facilities? The overview paragraph is very very important! Try to describe changes more accurately next time.

        Details Paragraphs: Your choice of linking words, like “for the began”, “due to the development” and “on the other hand” makes your essay incoherent.

        Pay attention to voice. It should be “will be added” and “will be moved”.

        Don’t use “due to the development”. Use “after redevelopment” instead.

        Like I said in this blog post, there is no north arrow. You don’t know which way is north. Therefore, you shouldn’t say “SOUTHWEST of the hall”.

        You need “passport control” and “security”, not “THE passport” and “THE security”.

        I give it a 5.5. If you solved the problems I pointed out, you would probably get a 6.

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